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Voices that take us to another level.
Poets who can make their pain our own.
Writers who can set us down in the midst
of confusion and, magicly, produce order.
Builders whose imagination can carry us
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The following comments are for "Potential"
by Dfortyseven


Another well but together thruth, nice and simple.
How about the one's that have it and are clueless?

Good read,


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

Has..."Potential"..what is it?
Dfortyseven- There is nothing original here. Sounds like beginning to a lecture or motivational speakers opening lines. Doesn't do anything, poetically, for me. I find hard to believe this would seem fresh thinking, to any "writer," reading here..Having said that, there is "potential," if you go with this opening and create something to add to the obvious. It's not a difficult riddle to figure out, since answer was given, before obvious hints...Just my take.

Will read more of your work. Keep writing.
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )


I canít speak for Keith, but my guess is he's referring to "potential" as a metaphor for the intangible. You cannot read this poem for its face value, itís abstract.


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

macbeth on "potential"
macbeth- "Hard work" is palpable..It can be discerned by the mind. "Wealth" is tangible..."We all have it (potential)," to me is understandable, thus not "abstract."..I'll stop.

I like the "Sounds of Power" one.. I'm just beginning to read this writer. I'm sure some here find my works not poetic or inspiring. I'll read more.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )


You are right, the part about $$ is tangible, however, I don't want to speak for the writer of this poem.

I think your work is poetic though.


( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

"Potential (Version II)"..making use of..
D47- Well, glad I found your "edited" version. It resembles in no way, the first version. I like the ideas here.

One spelling edit: "magically"

Keep using pen.
Robert William

P.S. Your first version partially inspired poem: "Black."

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 10, 2005 )

not too bad, but I think it lacks impact and involvement.

( Posted by: Ashmedai [Member] On: July 25, 2006 )

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