The following comments are for "POST COMMENTS HERE" by londongrey
Hey Tina, !! Alex!!!
YES Alex nice idea and I like Tina, HAD to join immediately. How did you know my pen was running dry?
Tina, welcome home, hope all is well and I love your poem.....the repetition is nice...
Thread, Good Job early-jumpers
This is great fun! Lit.org at it's best! So nice to see you all turning out for the party. Thank you Alex for the invite. I hope to join soon. Thinking about red, and marble, and blooms while I'm showering, or mopping the floor... lots of possibilities exist, but which make it all the way to page remain a mystery. My birthday is next week and I've asked over and over for a tape recorder... (I think they think I'm kidding... )
Please, keep up this linguisic good time. You all lift my spirits!
Blessings, each and every one-
I just couldn't help it
At first the poem came pouring out then I just couldn't seem to rhyme the rest and I had to get the words(big, red, marble) in so I hope you don't get angry that I finished it in story form ....Kacee
Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: June 6, 2005
I mean (red, marble, bloom) Kacee
Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: June 6, 2005
Red Marble Bloom Comments
Tinalouise’s He Said – A clever way to play against Londongrey’s challenge is to write a Mantra Poem. You beat us into doing that, Tina! I would assume this one was written for Alex, because I could imagine Alex reciting the words Red, Marble and Bloom? There’s something mystical about the last two lines, something akin to what Indian poets write.
Darlene’s Flowery Poetry – Reading this part is like standing underneath a shower of freshness and beauty. You photo-framed both the flowers and the poem here, Darlene, plus the love that’s picture-perfect!
Penelope’s Inedible Red – I would have frowned if this weren’t your usually perfect rhyming poem, Pen! Don’t you know that ‘tahong’ is a favorite here in the Philippines? My favorite too; but sometimes they become inedible in some parts of the country, you’ll be shocked at how many people got killed in the past eating this shellfish.
Alex’s Little French Scene – If I am not mistaken, the scene was about the police finding the corpse of Madam Du Pontiar beneath the Arc D’Triomphe? Pardon me, Alex. I don’t know French at all, but I’m sure Lucie knows and if we’re lucky, Tina does too. If I am wrong then we can just all laugh at my interpretation of your poem.
Ivor’s Marble Blooming Bust Sculpture – When I was first figuring out Alex’s word challenge I asked myself, how someone would connect ‘marble’ with ‘bloom’? And then here you are, you made the marble bloom! You didn’t lose your wit and humor in this one, Ivor!
Lucie’s Cinquain Treat – You made us gobble up all our pride Lu, by showing us the multiple poetry possibilities of these three words! Well, I have favorites in each one: 1-marble belly; 2-what will grow to bloom from marbles?; 3-scripts for dreams of red blooms; 4-red groan.
Char’s Love’s Ghost – A lovely, sad poem, Char. I loved how you wrapped the sounds of your past love (particularly the footsteps) in velvet. Taking it both literally and not worked for me. Reminiscing something good is very much like that.
Peter’s Red Bead Boo-Boo – Hmp! I just can’t stop thinking about it.
Which is where the Chateaux of Two Loves comes in,
Madam du Pontiar et gai Paris, J'ai Deux Amours!!!
Good to see you back
Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 6, 2005
read ma ball blume
Thanks to alex for your new thread. Tina's first post is just excellent and funny and could hardly be more appropriate to begin with. Dareva's delicious olfactory visuals are a delight to behold. Pen sells seashells by the seashore while Alex went Crime Scene Investigating in Parisian parks. Thanks for the tours.
Very crafty rhyming sculpture Ivor. Windchime, you show the versatility and wordsmithery of a versatile wordsmith. Char I was drawn into your poem. It was so moody and flowing. Peter, Great Prince - very powerful, especially that first stanza.
Thanks again alex. I will post another comment to next contributors soon. cheers. mick
I was re-reading the poetry thread agin. There's some wicked cool stuff on there. Of course, I knew everyone who contributed was first class (cream of the crop, as it were), but wow. There's tremendous variety, too, and it's fascinating to see where those three words lead each different mind . . .
Most of all I was impressed with JewelL, whose work I'm not that familiar with. Must check her out.
Peter's contribution, of course, was lovely and dreamlike and stirring.
Bea -- I found yours much darker than I'd expected, though it all works out.
Williamhill -- Man, you're weird. And funny.
Ivor surprised me as well, but not with his humour, which is what I love most about his work!
Alex -- it sounds beautiful to me, and I had no idea what it was about. Is Peter right? Que?
No no non
Re Alex's poem -- I didn't mean "beautiful," I meant "jaunty". I was still thinking about Peter's poem as I was writing. It also seems very British to me, like Kipling, which I suppose is appropriate.
Lucie, it is always such a nice thing to click on Comments and see your name. I used to look forward to seeing it in "What's New". Well these inklings and glimpses are very heartwarming.
Your work is always amazing.
I thank YOU for joining us and making us feel like "home" once again. I am taken aback with your writing.....I have to read it several more times as with everyones. Good thing I am a quick reader.......*wink*
To one nice thread. I saw those words and I had to write; they really struck a chord with me and this is a first thread for me. I couldn't help myself. It is good seeing everyone together. Thanks Alex, and congratulations on being published.
Thanks to everyone who said such nice things about my submission. I appreciate your kind comments.
I have to say everyone did a bang-up job on this. Way to go everyone!!! Write on......
I wrote this the other day and was going to put it up and then I read Elizabeth's Just Making Pie and thought that it was strange we had the same mind set...so I waited until a few more poems were up before adding mine...This is fun and everyone has done such a good job of adding their own touches to the thread...I hope more will add their 's...and I hope more threads will follow....Kacee
Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: June 8, 2005
Peter - POETRY THREAD
I have already completed the set task for the next Thread, I shall of course have to give it some time before posting another one!!
Peter I don't think your post needed revision, but yet again your mind produces something so vivid.
I still haven't had time to post on everyones, but that shall be coming up!!
Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 8, 2005
half a league, half a league....
Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 8, 2005
Alex, Smithy, Viper
Alex, thank you. I know how busy you are at work but you really take the time to put up a thread for everyone of us. I wonder what the next one will be. So we'll wait, I hope it's something as good as this one and that everybody can still join.
Mick, hey buddy! thank you for the nice words on my entry. I hope it could measure up to your wonderful, always adventurous poetry, in the meantime, I am just happy sharing the same page with you.
Viper, hey pal! I agree with you and with the word 'jaunty', I had the same feeling after reading Alex's part. But now that I asked my friend to translate the whole poem for me, I feel like I know more about Alex's romantic side. His poem is so youthful and lovely. It's really not about discovering a dead body in the bushes near a hotel, hehe. The Inspector is not the Polis but someone who is in the hotel with some sort of title.
AND HEY! Someone should come forward to finish commenting on the other poems, AND MAYBE one more submission to conclude this thread. Yeah? WHAT DO YOU GUYS THINK? Renae isn't showing up yet. How about Lilia, still kissin' under the London Bridge (didn't she mention travelling in Europe)? And hey, doesn't anyone wonder where Dan (Daprdan) is? He used to be so active in our threads. And Huni, and Melinda? Teflon,Capulet, DrSoos,Philo,SeanSpacey,CoK,Jason,Rcallaci,MzJen,Amy,CJH,Babypink,Xitwound,Bobby7L(not here yet?),DieD,nauticus(chris),Idomis,mercer,andyh,Gomar should jump in too, AND OF COURSE CLAIRE, who is the PROMOTOR of all these? July 12 will be the first anniversary of poetry threads.
I agree, it is sad to see all of these people missing, takes me back to read some of those actually its quite scary. Hard to believe we have been here for so long.
Thank you to everyone who has contributed to this thread, I am waiting a little while before posting up the next one.
Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 17, 2005
Holy crudtacular Batman!
I got a mention in here! Somebody noticed my 7 month departure! Considering I was barely here at all, and since I made only one or two posts in these The Thread things I feel that I didn't deserve a mention, but I feel missed all the same.