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by londongrey

Hey Tina, !! Alex!!!
YES Alex nice idea and I like Tina, HAD to join immediately. How did you know my pen was running dry?
Tina, welcome home, hope all is well and I love your poem.....the repetition is nice...

Dar ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

Tina, Dar and Pen!!!
What a great sight, three ditinct points of view side by side with the same three prompts to get you going!!

Tina the way you get into the words is almost chilling, the repitition works really well. Lol, don't worry about the word count!!

Dar I just sensed that a few people were had blocked poetic ducts, including me!!

These a great entries, Pen lucky no-one else posted!! Hehe

Alex xxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

Oh crap!!
In my poem 'simmered' is supposed ot be 'bloom', but I forgot to change it when going through.

*sniff*

*goes home*

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

OMG I am crying, Char, Lucie
Char, Windchime.....I am AWESTRUCK........

such beautiful writing....absolutley beautiful.

Dar

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

londen & All...
this has great possibilities...I think
I'll let it be known....
Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

Robin, get back here!!!
ya think??? hey girl, how are you? I hope you join this thread.........the more the better.
AND YOU KNOW you can do it.

Megwetch,
Darlene ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

Alex
oh my oh my, I don't know if my poem messed up your thread... :)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

Oh my
I feel down, beads doesn't rhyme with red... does it? (sigh)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

Thread, Good Job early-jumpers
This is great fun! Lit.org at it's best! So nice to see you all turning out for the party. Thank you Alex for the invite. I hope to join soon. Thinking about red, and marble, and blooms while I'm showering, or mopping the floor... lots of possibilities exist, but which make it all the way to page remain a mystery. My birthday is next week and I've asked over and over for a tape recorder... (I think they think I'm kidding... )
Please, keep up this linguisic good time. You all lift my spirits!
Blessings, each and every one-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Thanks Alex!
Man, I needed this. Batteries running low these days. My last post sucked. Then this came along to jazz me up!

Hope I didn't fuck up your thread.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

I just couldn't help it
At first the poem came pouring out then I just couldn't seem to rhyme the rest and I had to get the words(big, red, marble) in so I hope you don't get angry that I finished it in story form ....Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Oops
I mean (red, marble, bloom) Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Red Alex
Nice job, Alex.

williamhill

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Alex in Full Bloom
I love your poem! Very clever - but of course! What else from my love?? So lovely.

Kudos all, well done!

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Hail, Hail, the gang's all here!
Alex, like a white knight on his horse, you came galloping in to save the day at Lit! Now if only we can keep it going!

And guess what....LUCY'S BACK! Hooray! Seems like old times...before you know it...we'll have enough for a party again!

Tina, Pen. Darlene, William Hill,Kacee,Char, Viper,Peter, Elizabeth, Alex (you naughty boy!!!!) Ivor and Peter...Great fun...seems like old times! The muses are alive and well again at Lit!

Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Red/Marble/Bloom
Wow. That was FUN! And all of you, reading your work inspired me to go a little deeper than some of my previous stuff.

Thanks for the idea, the inspiration, and the company!!

-Leann (JewelL)

( Posted by: JewelL [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Red Marble Bloom Comments
Tinalouise’s He Said – A clever way to play against Londongrey’s challenge is to write a Mantra Poem. You beat us into doing that, Tina! I would assume this one was written for Alex, because I could imagine Alex reciting the words Red, Marble and Bloom? There’s something mystical about the last two lines, something akin to what Indian poets write.

Darlene’s Flowery Poetry – Reading this part is like standing underneath a shower of freshness and beauty. You photo-framed both the flowers and the poem here, Darlene, plus the love that’s picture-perfect!

Penelope’s Inedible Red – I would have frowned if this weren’t your usually perfect rhyming poem, Pen! Don’t you know that ‘tahong’ is a favorite here in the Philippines? My favorite too; but sometimes they become inedible in some parts of the country, you’ll be shocked at how many people got killed in the past eating this shellfish.

Alex’s Little French Scene – If I am not mistaken, the scene was about the police finding the corpse of Madam Du Pontiar beneath the Arc D’Triomphe? Pardon me, Alex. I don’t know French at all, but I’m sure Lucie knows and if we’re lucky, Tina does too. If I am wrong then we can just all laugh at my interpretation of your poem.

Ivor’s Marble Blooming Bust Sculpture – When I was first figuring out Alex’s word challenge I asked myself, how someone would connect ‘marble’ with ‘bloom’? And then here you are, you made the marble bloom! You didn’t lose your wit and humor in this one, Ivor!

Lucie’s Cinquain Treat – You made us gobble up all our pride Lu, by showing us the multiple poetry possibilities of these three words! Well, I have favorites in each one: 1-marble belly; 2-what will grow to bloom from marbles?; 3-scripts for dreams of red blooms; 4-red groan.

Char’s Love’s Ghost – A lovely, sad poem, Char. I loved how you wrapped the sounds of your past love (particularly the footsteps) in velvet. Taking it both literally and not worked for me. Reminiscing something good is very much like that.

Peter’s Red Bead Boo-Boo – Hmp! I just can’t stop thinking about it.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Peter! Everyone!!!
Wow! I never expected so many people, especially those who have been away, Lucie it is so good to see you.

I will have to start a comments launch on MS Word and then come back to post it there are so many!!

Peter, lol, here is some translation, I hope Lucie does not pick up on what may be awful French grammar:

Chateaux de Deux Amours - Chateaux of Two Loves
Dans l'amour? - in love?
Toujours dans l'amour - Always in love

I hope that makes it clearer *wink*

Thanks to everyone who has taken part so far, I still see some names missing though!!

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

LOL Alex
LOL, thanks Alex! And hey, I congratulate you for becoming published! :)

Okay, I should be back with a comment on your pice.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Lilia
And so Lilia, don't you dare go without a part of your own! LOL :)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Alex
And how about 'et gai Paris'? Sorry... :(

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Ah c'mon Peter
You are pulling my leg?

et gai Paris - and gay Paris

Which is where the Chateaux of Two Loves comes in,
Madam du Pontiar et gai Paris, J'ai Deux Amours!!!

Hehehe

Good to see you back

Alex xxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

read ma ball blume
Thanks to alex for your new thread. Tina's first post is just excellent and funny and could hardly be more appropriate to begin with. Dareva's delicious olfactory visuals are a delight to behold. Pen sells seashells by the seashore while Alex went Crime Scene Investigating in Parisian parks. Thanks for the tours.

Very crafty rhyming sculpture Ivor. Windchime, you show the versatility and wordsmithery of a versatile wordsmith. Char I was drawn into your poem. It was so moody and flowing. Peter, Great Prince - very powerful, especially that first stanza.

Thanks again alex. I will post another comment to next contributors soon. cheers. mick

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Creamy goodness
I was re-reading the poetry thread agin. There's some wicked cool stuff on there. Of course, I knew everyone who contributed was first class (cream of the crop, as it were), but wow. There's tremendous variety, too, and it's fascinating to see where those three words lead each different mind . . .

Most of all I was impressed with JewelL, whose work I'm not that familiar with. Must check her out.

Peter's contribution, of course, was lovely and dreamlike and stirring.

Bea -- I found yours much darker than I'd expected, though it all works out.

Williamhill -- Man, you're weird. And funny.

Ivor surprised me as well, but not with his humour, which is what I love most about his work!

Alex -- it sounds beautiful to me, and I had no idea what it was about. Is Peter right? Que?

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

No no non
Re Alex's poem -- I didn't mean "beautiful," I meant "jaunty". I was still thinking about Peter's poem as I was writing. It also seems very British to me, like Kipling, which I suppose is appropriate.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Ma Bell Blume Read
Viper, very interesting Deliverence. There were some special lines in there. I feel like a slack-jawed yokel.

That's an interesting story Nitz Kitty well presented as a rhyme about your father and Al Capone. You should maybe continue it and post it as a full poem?

hah! WilliamHill. I was thinking of bloomers and pantaloomers rhyming too. It didn't fit in with the context I went with though. That was a fun read. Canine capers and a good rhyme structure.

Very heartfelt and touching poem Beatrice Boyle. A nice softer sadder mood.

Before the explosion that is Jewel's Passion. Boy, wave a Red Marble Bloom and kaboom. Jewel takes off! Excellent. The ending faded just a little but good passionate writing otherwise.

cheers to all and alex for the thread
mick

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Dear (((((Windchime)))))
Lucie, it is always such a nice thing to click on Comments and see your name. I used to look forward to seeing it in "What's New". Well these inklings and glimpses are very heartwarming.
Your work is always amazing.

I thank YOU for joining us and making us feel like "home" once again. I am taken aback with your writing.....I have to read it several more times as with everyones. Good thing I am a quick reader.......*wink*

So many of us miss you dearly.

Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Cheers!!
To one nice thread. I saw those words and I had to write; they really struck a chord with me and this is a first thread for me. I couldn't help myself. It is good seeing everyone together. Thanks Alex, and congratulations on being published.

Thanks to everyone who said such nice things about my submission. I appreciate your kind comments.

I have to say everyone did a bang-up job on this. Way to go everyone!!! Write on......



( Posted by: Char [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Alex - here
I revised the first and last stanzas of my poem, to make up for the lousy rhymes, here:

(first)
His lips drenched with red,
Shedding Bordeaux down his chin,
Skin marble-cold, though his stare
Flares like the furnace that we share.

(last)
We are sure to unite, I and Darkness
Sweetness in my veins he shan’t miss
His fangs now gleaming with bloodshed,
Deadly, obscenely bare bodkins.


( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: June 7, 2005 )

bookend
I wrote this the other day and was going to put it up and then I read Elizabeth's Just Making Pie and thought that it was strange we had the same mind set...so I waited until a few more poems were up before adding mine...This is fun and everyone has done such a good job of adding their own touches to the thread...I hope more will add their 's...and I hope more threads will follow....Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

Peter - POETRY THREAD
I have already completed the set task for the next Thread, I shall of course have to give it some time before posting another one!!

Peter I don't think your post needed revision, but yet again your mind produces something so vivid.

I still haven't had time to post on everyones, but that shall be coming up!!

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

someone blundered
Eric,

half a league, half a league....

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

Alex, Smithy, Viper
Alex, thank you. I know how busy you are at work but you really take the time to put up a thread for everyone of us. I wonder what the next one will be. So we'll wait, I hope it's something as good as this one and that everybody can still join.

Mick, hey buddy! thank you for the nice words on my entry. I hope it could measure up to your wonderful, always adventurous poetry, in the meantime, I am just happy sharing the same page with you.

Viper, hey pal! I agree with you and with the word 'jaunty', I had the same feeling after reading Alex's part. But now that I asked my friend to translate the whole poem for me, I feel like I know more about Alex's romantic side. His poem is so youthful and lovely. It's really not about discovering a dead body in the bushes near a hotel, hehe. The Inspector is not the Polis but someone who is in the hotel with some sort of title.

AND HEY! Someone should come forward to finish commenting on the other poems, AND MAYBE one more submission to conclude this thread. Yeah? WHAT DO YOU GUYS THINK? Renae isn't showing up yet. How about Lilia, still kissin' under the London Bridge (didn't she mention travelling in Europe)? And hey, doesn't anyone wonder where Dan (Daprdan) is? He used to be so active in our threads. And Huni, and Melinda? Teflon,Capulet, DrSoos,Philo,SeanSpacey,CoK,Jason,Rcallaci,MzJen,Amy,CJH,Babypink,Xitwound,Bobby7L(not here yet?),DieD,nauticus(chris),Idomis,mercer,andyh,Gomar should jump in too, AND OF COURSE CLAIRE, who is the PROMOTOR of all these? July 12 will be the first anniversary of poetry threads.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: June 9, 2005 )

And
I noticed GG, Andy(sd), Vodka aren't joining too?! We could've made this up to forty parts if only everybody joined!

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: June 9, 2005 )

Peter - Poetry Thread
Hi Peter,

I agree, it is sad to see all of these people missing, takes me back to read some of those actually its quite scary. Hard to believe we have been here for so long.

Thank you to everyone who has contributed to this thread, I am waiting a little while before posting up the next one.

Alex xxxxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 17, 2005 )

Holy crudtacular Batman!
I got a mention in here! Somebody noticed my 7 month departure! Considering I was barely here at all, and since I made only one or two posts in these The Thread things I feel that I didn't deserve a mention, but I feel missed all the same.

Ah well, that's all I had to say.

( Posted by: xitwound117 [Member] On: August 1, 2005 )





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