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A scarecrow looks at the little girl
who is crying at the loss in front of her,
two cadavers rotting in the buckwheat
clutching the feet of the bird scare.

Its shadow lay across their feet like
a bending mind bowing to them with
their backs turned up, the girl in powder
blue dress stands and stares in its eyes.

'I told them not to touch you', she says.
'I found them with your clothes.'
'Now they still have not listened.'
'Holding all your toes!'

The girl takes the bodies by the hands
dragging them away from its feet,
she sighs and blinks and looks at her dress
powder blue with a growing red rose.

'I told them not to touch you.'
'I found them with your clothes.'
She dropped the scythe, looked at her hands
red gloves to match the rose.


------
Ask not what you can do to poetry, but what poetry can do to you.


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The following comments are for "Deep in the Valley"
by londongrey

Alex........chill.....wow
Um, this is really good, such a frightening tale really. Or is my imagination just running away with this........whatever, it is really good Alex.
Have you ever written like this before? Kind of a Twilight zone thing happening.

I have to come back and read this some more. THIS is the kind of poem that sticks to me.

Darlene :)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

How dark
I love it!

- clutching the feet of the bird scare.

Bird scare? Am I missing something?

- 'I told them not to touch you', she says.
'I found them with your clothes.'
'Now they still have not listened.'
'Holding all your toes!'

Weee! Great!

It's been awhile since I've checked out your stuff. When did it become so, hee, dark?

Andy

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

Dar and Andy
Thanks guys!

I just thought that for once I was going to have fun with my writing, it has always been a bit heavy for me, like it takes itself to seriously.

More dark stuff coming up!!!

Andy 'bird scare' is basically what a scare crow is!! Isn't it?? I hope.

A child killer, nothing more chilling *evil grin*. It was actually Andy with your twisted posts that I got inspired to start having fun with it.

A xxx :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

LondonBlack
Alex, I am curious to see where you go in this vein. You are so brilliant in the voice I'm accustomed to reading.

The "bird scare" line was great! This line was strained to me "'Now they still have not listened.'" I had a hard time hearing a little girl say that. But we Americans know that y'alls have the better speakin'.

Upon the first read, I had a hard time grasping the abstraction. But then I got it. Pretty cool, bebe. Keep on keepin on.

Get down,

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Alex's "bird scare"
Alex- Read this yesterday and have now been reminded to come back by above comments.

I really like the "bird scare," as well.
It's nice to see various styles and subjects from one writer. When I read the same basic thing, rehashed over and over from a writer, I tend to drift away..

Great read..You being inspired by "Drew," is pretty cool. You guys are pretty alright in my book...

Rave up!
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Revolting Roald Dahl
Slightly skewed topic:

I just recently purchased a book by Roald Dahl called Revolting Rhymes. I worship this man, of course, but he is a good source for fucking up yours and others' brains.

The book I mentioned is reworking Red Riding Hood, et al. You probably know it, being a Brit, but I highly recommend it!

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

Dahl
I followed GG's comment here, because I worship at the feet of Roald Dahl. And this reminds me of his work -- dark but fun, twisted but inviting.

More like this, please!!!

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: June 6, 2005 )

scythe
Oh Gee, it looks as though all the good comments have been passed out and I'll be forced to reiterate.

I love the piece where she repeats herself. It's a chilling sign of madness. You use some very creepy words.

Emlyn

( Posted by: Emlyn [Member] On: June 8, 2005 )

Hello Lit.Org
Just wanted to post a quick hello,

Just managed to get home, was on the Piccadilly LIne on the Underground as things expired this morning. Watched the whole thing unfold at home and have to say I have been in tears for most of the day watching the casualties and listening to peoples accounts of being stuck underground with bodies and blood.

Please can others who are from London let us know they are okay?

My prayers to all the families of those injured and killed this morning, after the glorious day here yesterday with news of the 1012 Olympics this is just to horrible to sink in at the moment.

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

HELLO LONDON
Alex, thank God!!

(one prayer answered)

Oh I am so sorry for the news of your sad disaster. I am reminded of the sickness that haunts our world, and - .....

Thank you for reminding me of life.

I love you sweetie,

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

london's best

god save us all

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Alex.....
Alex,

What can anyone say or do, glad your OK..

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Alex and Ivor
I am so happy to hear you are both safe and sound. I hope other friends will pop in and say they are ok too. My heart is with you all.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Alex, Ivor, Tina, Eric
and all our other English friends ........

Alex, relieved to hear you are physically ok, but the turmoil must be devastating,,,,,even here in Canada it's reached us, talking of 1/2 mast flags...English folks around here are to gather for Prayers...
Thanks for this thoughtful note to us Alex, you KNOW you are dear to many of us and this was very thoughtful for us.........thank you!!

Well, I hope Ivor, that you, your brother, family and friends are all ok.......
Tina dear, same with you.....PLEASE keep us posted and let us know you are all ok.........

Blessings,
Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Dar..
Dar,

Eric was at our house this morning when this happened. Alex sounds like he was in the thick of it actually on the tube.

I have just posted a rant on my thoughts and I think at this moment the less I say the better,

Thanks for your concern,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Brit Friends/ Tina, Eric ok?
I have so little time here these days. Had to pop in hoping and praying my Brit Lit friends were safe. Thank you for posting. Peace to you all, and best blessings. I cry for you, and for us all...

May the 'great'8 DO something!!

(Imagine all the energy put into war to go instead to aid impoverished Africa... were is John Lennon when ya need him? )

Again, your horrors are felt around the world. So glad you are, at least, safe.

Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Proud to be Human?
Alex,

My heart goes out to everyone caught up in this in your home city. In spite of my previous comment I am going to promote my rant to a comment here as it says how I feel about this at the moment.
~~~~~~~~~~~~

I don't live in London, I don't live in Manchester, I don't live in Warrington or any of the city centres that have been subject to bombings.

The truth is, in a way I also feel that if I was so deeply convinced by been brought up believing that the people who bombed my country and killed my friends and family were evil, I too might decide to take revenge.

I have no symphathy for people who kill and maim innocent people. I have no symphathy for governments who let atrocities go ignored and preach the rightiousness of going to war when it fits in with their political objectives.

In the meantime, Africans, Americans, Jews, Palestinians and just about every nationality on the planet are killed, maimed, raped or tortured. And today yet again in my homeland.

Proud to be human? Not at the moment, our species is the lowest of the low when it comes to reallity. When will this madness stop... certainly not in our lifetime.

I write poetrey, explaining that we are all responsible for how we behave and live in this world.... what an utter and complete waste of time! Not that I don't believe it, I just think most people are incapable of change.

What should we do, let the miserable be a misery, the happy be happy, killers kill, healers heal? Yes I supose that just about sums it up.

Me, you can bomb me, insult me, kill my countrymen, but like most of us over here, I'll still enjoy life to the full.

What comes around, goes around, but when are we going to get off the bloody roundabout?

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Nae,
Nae,

Sorry I didn't mean to ignore you, my mind is not with it at the moment. Thanks for the concern. You may not be quite as happy when you see my reference to you on Pen's Nursery thread though!

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Alex,
Sorry Alex,

Forgot to say I enjoyed your poem, welcome to the dark side...

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Brits at Lit
I'm so happy to hear from you Ivor and to hear that Eric is okay.

I don't think now is quite the time to start discussing the injustice of the global stage we live in today, the dead are yet to be buried here in London and after my experience of watching terrified tourists crying in confusion covered in black soot from head to toe I have to say any Londoner today is not in the mood to accomodate any discussion right now.

I do have to say that I am so proud of this city, the emergency services, the help londoners gave to frightened tourists and too the injured was immeasurable, and the emergency services never faultered nor did they turn the events into a theatre production. It happened, it was dealt with.

Any discussion with regards to the world stage and events abroad would be more suited to the end of the G8 Summit. It is difficult for those not directly involved in what happened or even to London to understand that in any case there has to be a delay in certain discussions.

To ask us at this time to care about other nations problems, rape, torture and genocide, I think is asking for something that is unnatural. Personally, at any other time I do care, but right now my thoughts are at home where they should be. The praise needs to be given to the heroic actions of those ordinary people today.

Thanks to everyone for their kind words of support and love.

But my thoughts at the moment are with the families of those who have lost loved ones and who are still yet to find out if their loved ones are alive. This isn't as big as 9/11, but the legacy is the same.

I hope Tina and the others are well.

( Posted by: Londongrey [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

Londongrey
Alex, I didn't mean to turn attention from the tragedy you are experiencing. Truly, my thoughts pour to you and fellow citizens who have been assaulted.
You have much to be proud of. I particularly liked the press conference that we saw here where an official was questioned about the "Islamic- terrorists" and he vehemently protested the use of "Islamic" in conjucture with "terrorists".
May seem minor, but seems to be a distinction not often made.
Horror is horror, Alex. There is no appropriate measure.
I wish you best of everything-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: July 7, 2005 )

7/7/05 = 9/11/01
My heart goes out to all my British friends. So happy to hear (so far) that you are all well...physically. I know you will all come out of this with the same spirit you displayed during the war...you are a tough adversary for any foe! I always remember your battle cry back then..."There Will Always be an England!" and indeed...there will!

Love,
Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: July 8, 2005 )





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