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Star that's fallen to the night,
Shining dark from absent light,
Gathering countless masses,
Circled by violent gases,
Grasping ‘round a trillion miles,
Heaven quakes and Shiva smiles.

"I must create my own system, or be enslaved by another man's"-William Blake

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The following comments are for "Ode to a Black Hole"
by Malthis

Einstein Grins
Interesting little poem that took me a couple of reads to understand. THought it was entertaining and sort of fun.


( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: July 10, 2002 )

I'm glad it took a couple reads, cause it's supposed to be that way. I also wonder if anyone gets my meaning behind the last line.
I'm revising "Scattering countless masses" to "Gathering coutless masses"
Clearer, I think.

( Posted by: Malthis [Member] On: July 10, 2002 )

to Malthis
There's something very akin to the acopalypse in it, to me at least. Great imagery but wistfully violent, one might say. Gathering is clearer.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: July 13, 2002 )

i really, really liked this one. nice grasp of the cosmic.
when i think shiva, i think 'dancing destroyer,' which is about the best description of the nature of the universe i have ever heard.
i think gathering is a better word as well

( Posted by: thecheef [Member] On: July 13, 2002 )

I'm glad to see that people like the impressions this gives. I wanted to explain the last line, though 'thecheef' got the Shiva aspect. The last line is my move from the whimsical to the profound. Heaven in a stand alone context might mean the cosmos, but when paired in the same line as Shiva I wanted to invoke the two Theologies. Heaven of Christianity is lawful and ordered, where any chaos becomes an aspect of Satan to be crushed under the victorious foot of the lamb. But here we have a cosmic event that questions Heaven's rule. It goes back to the question, "How can a good God allow these things to exist?" Shiva, the destroyer, is beyond moral values and represents the sheer horror of nature gone mad. If anyone would like to comment on this interpretation, if it works for you or more importantly it came across this way, feel free to comment.

( Posted by: malthis [Member] On: July 13, 2002 )

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