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I spent so many years
Down in that hole.
The only choices:
Rot in the bottom
Or climb.
I chose to climb,
Inch by painful inch,
Every muscle clenched,
Drenched in sweat,
Elbows, knees and palms
Scraped raw in the struggle.
Sliding down, losing ground,
Fighting back.
Adrenaline surged
As I neared the surface.
One hand emerged
And grasped cool, green grass.
The sun hit my face
As I dragged myself
Out of my prison.

Now I roll onto my back
And let the warmth bake me.
The horizon stretches out into Infinity
In every direction.

Okay now what?

------
Time flies like an arrow. Fruit flies like a banana. - Groucho Marx



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The following comments are for "Getting There"
by LinnieRed

Nice flow Linnie
Greetings,

I really liked the smooth flow that didn't seem rushed, yet marched along with a nice cadence.

This made me think of people I had known through my brother-in-law's prison ministry. When they finally got out, there's was a looming sense of "now what!?"

I tend to think repeat incarcerations often have somewhat to do with this kind of thing.

This poem is so universal. I'm sure people in very different situations, will really relate to it.

Good Write,

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

Linniered: "Getting There"
Linnie- I enjoyed this read and agree with Felicia and Lilia, regarding appeal.

The only thing I found question with: "Infinity" is tough act to follow...You may consider:

...'The horizon stretches in all directions/Out into Infinity'...

Good read,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

Felicia/Bobby/Dem re: "Getting There"
Thanks to all who commented! So glad you liked it, as I respect your opinions.

Felicia, I'd suspected this image could apply to many life situations - from completing formal education to overcoming serious illness (including the serious illness of addiction,) but I actually never thought of the most literal situation of all - release from criminal incarceration. Of course! My magnificent 80-some-year-old mother in law volunteers in a program designed to help inmates accept personal responsibility for the behavior that put them in prison and start to make better life choices. I'm sure one of their goals is to help make the prisoners' release less daunting or overwhelming.

RobWill, I see your point exactly: simply rearranging those two phrases places greater emphasis on "Infinity." Thanks much!

And as for you, Ms. D: First, thanks for the provocative subject line in your first comment! That was either another aspect of the deity, in this case the Goddess of Shameless Promotion of Others, or it was payback for the provocative subject lines I've used on comments to you! As for the question therein, what makes you think the two choices are necessarily mutually exclusive?

Regarding your second comment: Isn't that a lovely predicament to be in? The thing is, everybody tells you how wonderful it will be when you "make it," but nobody prepares you for the momentary disorientation. When all you've known is struggling, it can take some time to "shift gears" and learn how to move in a new direction at a new pace. I'm delighted to know that you're in such a joyful place! I'm sure you've earned it, and with your depth of spirituality, you're probably better prepared for it than most folks. In fact, I think you've found greater meaning in this poem than even I imagined. I don't know whether to say "Thanks!" or "Cut that out!" I guess thanks are in order - as always! : )

Oh, yeah - Thanks also to Myth for the generous rating! Talk to me! Did I touch a nerve?

( Posted by: LinnieRed [Member] On: May 31, 2005 )

RealP: Like mother, like daughter
Thanks for stopping by & commenting! Glad to see you've inherited your mom's excellent taste! Hee-hee! (Who said that???)

Especially gratified to know that I managed to express these feelings in a way that resonates with you and with the other folks who have commented. Whenever I'm getting all "symbolic" in my writing, I always have in the back of my mind the nagging question, "I know what I'm trying to say, but will anyone else 'get it?'" Pardon me while I breathe a huge sigh of relief: Phew! It worked!

I'll definitely check our your poem, as I've done my own fair share of "wanting more" in the course of my life. I'll meet you over there...

( Posted by: LinnieRed [Member] On: June 4, 2005 )





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