The following comments are for "Obliterating..." by ladyngold
This little so true, and lucky for us as it allows us to see it coming. The people I know who have ruined their chances in life just because thery couldn't keep their mouths shut!
Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 3, 2005
"Obliterating"... A Haiku
Thanks for your preception of this Haiku which if looked at from your preception it would then be a Senyru I think...these little Japanese poems can get me so confused at times.
Posted by: ladyngold [Member] On: June 3, 2005
ladyngold: i would like to see 'rolling' removed here. if it were not for that one word, i think this haiku would be lovely. the rest of the haiku supports that the boulder is rolling.