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Obliterating
the rolling angry boulder
crashing so loudly


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`always write poetry, Cheryl


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by ladyngold

Noisy Boulders!
Cheryl,

This little so true, and lucky for us as it allows us to see it coming. The people I know who have ruined their chances in life just because thery couldn't keep their mouths shut!

Namaste,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 3, 2005 )

"Obliterating"... A Haiku
Thanks for your preception of this Haiku which if looked at from your preception it would then be a Senyru I think...these little Japanese poems can get me so confused at times.

( Posted by: ladyngold [Member] On: June 3, 2005 )

Ladyngold's Haiku
ladyngold: i would like to see 'rolling' removed here. if it were not for that one word, i think this haiku would be lovely. the rest of the haiku supports that the boulder is rolling.

( Posted by: skulduggery [Member] On: June 3, 2005 )

Lets Compromise Skul
Might consider "angry rolling..." would that help this Haiku be more acceptable to you?

( Posted by: ladyngold [Member] On: June 3, 2005 )





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