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He was an arachnid, and quite dedicated to his craft.
"You know what I did and why I did it?" she asked.
He walked away slowly yet she continued raising her voice.
"You were weaving your web and I was caught inside. You kept spinning and spinning."
She imagined he flinched as he stopped and turned.
“Were they tangled?”, he asked.
She shook her head.
“Were they tight?” he continued.
"I was making a bandage."
She lowered her head, and noticed a forgotten wound, oozing with red.
“It was a misunderstanding,” she whispered.
But he was long gone.

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The following comments are for "On spiders and such"
by greatsmile

Thank you Felinewhip
You made my day, I sincerely mean that. Have a great Memorial day weekend.

( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: May 28, 2005 )

Thanks Demeter
I am new at but can see that I am going to enjoy it already. I love all sorts of feedback, positve or constructive :). So please keep it coming.

( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

i am liking this
very much.

very clever, if you ask me.


( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

greatsmile- My, my, my...
greatsmile- I'm smiling. Really enjoyed the read. An interesting entanglement...

You will enjoy Lit.

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

Bobby and JohnJohndoe I do appraciate your appreciation.

Yes, I can see that this is a friendly forum and look forward to your feedback in the future :)

( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: May 31, 2005 )

On spiders and such
A scene to break your heart and an intelligent metaphor. Such a scenario as this is so hard to capture yet you have planted it so simply down, retaining the choke factor amazingly.

( Posted by: A. Cain [Member] On: June 1, 2005 )

choke factor you say?
thank you :)

( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: June 2, 2005 )

I lied, I have read your work. This piece, in fact, which is majestic, the finest piece of microfiction I've read in a coon's age. After reading it I wracked my brain trying to do something similar, but all I got was a got that snorted cocaine.

Very sharp, well written - this piece has earned my adoration :)



( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: June 2, 2005 )

Now I am in a total blush and can only hope against hope that your compliment doesn't get to my head.

I read some more of your work and am quite sure now, yes I can say with certainty that you would like my story "If you play with fire." Go ahead read it.

My treat for you :)

( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: June 2, 2005 )

Nicely done. I'm going to find your other stuff. This left me wanting more. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

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