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The lightning like a zealous photographer,
rudely snaps at the earth-
naked, ostentatious under all consuming light.

Stark silhouettes,
humble under heaven\'s wrath.
Forks varicose downward thundering entreaties for more.

Armies of raindrops counter-melodic,
storming siege upon cowering clay.
Sodden earth pounded into dumb acceptance,
buffeted into submission.

Copyright 1995, Kate McInnes

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The following comments are for "The Rape of the Rain"
by gingerwarrior

eery idea..
i love the choice of words that you use for this poem because of the idea of how things are. I really like how this makes me look differently at this terrible weather i've been having for 3 straight days in the Garden State.

( Posted by: ryangilr0y [Member] On: May 26, 2005 )

The lay of the land
Your poem gave me graphic images of relentless rain in a dark night.

Words you use such as zealous ostentatious varicose (amongst many others) are all 'lightening' words to me in the onomatopoiac sense.

You have quite a talent.
One to be read aloud


( Posted by: Emlyn [Member] On: May 27, 2005 )

Great Imagery
with use of tight woven phrases.....very well done.


( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: May 27, 2005 )

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