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I had just finished taking my last exam of finals week and I fel numb. It was chemistry so I was pretty sure I had bombed that test very badly, but such things I don't worry about. It's too upsetting. So when I was supposed to be tinking about Lewis Dot structures, I was really thinking about that last slice of pizza from last night . . . Mmmm, so good. It was a large, 14 inch pizza with sausage, bell peppers, mushrooms, black olives, onions, and a thick crust . . . I was drooling over my exam paper.

So as I rode the bus home, my stomach growled and whined, thinking about that last slice. It would make my day.

I get home at about 3:30 as I usually do and I rummage through the mail first. The pizza is still on my mind but I'm always curious to see if I got anything. I got a few letters, nothing special; an advertisement for blockbuster and a letter from some bs college in the middle of Texas.

Lubbuck I think was the name of the town.

I walk into my house, slip off my back pack, and make a beeline to the fridge, ignoring my cat who think he's too important to use the cat door. I swing open the fridge door, looking frantically for that slice of Papa John's pizza. It isn't there.

"What the crap?" I say as I usually do when I'm disappointed.

Then: "Hey, Sean."

I turn around and see my sister, sprawled on the couch as she always does. She's watching VH1 and next to her is an empty plate, the orangish oil from the pizza still warm on the plate from the microwave. I feel my heart drop into my stomach.

"Did you eat the pizza?" I ask her even though I already know the answer.

"Yep," she replies with a smug look on her face and holds up the last piece of the crust. Then she eats it, "and it was good . . ."

I opened my mouth to say something by I don't speak. What's the point? So instead I grab the box of Cap'n Crunch and pour myself a bowl. Thinking about that slice of pizza, the cereal is like ashes in my mouth.

"Dang it."




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The following comments are for "Leftovers"
by TheGreatSage

been there..
It's kinda pathetic when you're hungry and you dream of leftovers. I like that metaphor of ashes in your mouth.

Couple of things:

[1] Orangish- is not a word
[2] No reason to use "I" twice in the first sentence
[3] This sentence,
"Yep," she replies with a smug look on her face and holds up the last piece of the crust. Then she eats it, "and it was good . . ."

Could be worded as follows
"Yep," she replied with a smug look on her face as she held up the last piece of crust, before slipping that too into her mouth. "And it was good," she added.

[4] Check your spelling :)



( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: May 27, 2005 )

Thanks
Thanks for the comment, but cut me some slack, I wrote the whole thing in about twenty minutes during my lunch period and was bored. Given that, I think it's an okay piece of writing. I also know that orangish is not a word, but it would be a word I would use if I were just telling the story to a friend. Keep in mind, bs isn't exactly a word either. The I's, sure, but once again it was just something I wrote in the spur of the moment. Thanks for the comment.

( Posted by: TheGreatSage [Member] On: May 27, 2005 )

Quackzeemoto
I like eating leftover pizza. It brings back the happy times of university and you've certainly captured the feelings and the heartache you feel when the pizza is finally gone.

The dictionary lists 'reddish' as a word but not 'orangish' which I find odd. Personally I have not problem with making up words, I quite often deglower them.

I know you wrote it quickly but two minutes on the spellcheck will stop those 'correct spelling' comments however I'm fairly bad at that myself, I call my blunders 'made up' words.

Anyway interesting thing to write about and done well for a lunch hour.

Emlyn

( Posted by: Emlyn [Member] On: May 28, 2005 )





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