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Clockwise at the Crossroads

I am at the windows to my world
Looking out
and in
and all around

I move in fluid requiem
skimming over pools of dark matter
Pilot light
on an organic time capsule

Colors and brightness
fade to black
a 3-D snapshot
in 360 degree panorama-vision

Fireflies swim lazily by
Sending flashes of blue laser
Like little light spears
From one to another

I feel my way to the center
of the spiraling web
cleaving space
through force of will

I am at the core
Listening in
and out
and all around

Fingering the pulse
switching frequency and vibration
Daze of deja vu
a riddle repeating infinitely

Electricity crackles
sparks arc along divergent lines
smoke from burning flesh
seeps into my lungs

I hear the sizzle of the fuse
feel the time-bomb tick
as a shooting star fell from the sky
plunged straight into my eye

I am the fog
white tendrils of mist
wrap in, out and all around
reality whiplashes - butt of a gun moment.


Like the grasses showing tender faces to each other, thus should we do, for this was the wish of the Grandfathers of the World.

Black Elk

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The following comments are for "Clockwise at the Crossroads"
by Smithy

Left is right, cause the right is wrong
Trippy's the right word to describe this. I'm left feeling pleasantly confused.

"center" is centre, tut tut, English is English, That's what our countries specialize in.

I love the way the first and last verses overlap lines


( Posted by: Emlyn [Member] On: May 23, 2005 )

pleasant trips
Hah. Thanks guys. Glad you enjoyed. Very trippy indeed Demeter. Thanks for dropping in.

Which way was it again Emlyn? Towards the centre or away from the center? I blame the spellchek for that and not the operator who can hardly be held accountable for his own actions. Thanks for dropping by.

Bob, I orignally had the shooting star falling into the ear. Can you beleive it? What was I thinking? Lucky I rewrote that part. Thanks again.


( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: May 24, 2005 )

Well, you know I am a fan of your Great Milky Way Mind! Shooting star falling into the ear would've not stirred my senses better. I am glad in the end you decided against it and used eye. Really sometimes watching something happening feels like they happen inside your eyes, it's the same case as in watching a shooting star fall even if it landed behind the mountains.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: May 25, 2005 )

the ear of seeing peripherally
Thanks Tina and Peter.

Yes Tina, Brisbane has a pretty good sub-tropical climate so it is a nice warm place to live almost all year. There are lots of parks and trees and the suburbs sprawl out to the bay and the ranges. I like trippy but "cheeky" is even better. It is amazing how everyone picked up on the essence here. Glad you enjoyed.

Hey peter. There's a galaxy of neurons in this ole' grey cloudy matter to be explored and exported. Yes I agree about what we see. It is as if the internal world is reflected on the eyedome of our preceptions.

I thought ear originally because that is what happened. This shooting star shot down out of the sky and dissapeared into my ear. At least that's how it looked in the corner of my eye. Maybe it was just a flash of a headlight or the swaying of the streetlights? It looked like a shooting star!

Thanks for your comments. Glad you enjoyed the journey.


( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: May 25, 2005 )

Riddle Me This

The riddle repeating infinitely; that's the part I like best.

I know another scientist who is into writing sci/fantasy, here in the San Francisco Bay Area. I have read parts of some of his stories and commented to him on what I perceived as a lack of much expression on love relationships in them. That didn't seem to concern him.

I am not well read in that area, though, so don't know what its devotees are looking for in a good story. I did read Battlefield Earth, years ago, and thought it was good. Does that count?

~ John

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: June 4, 2005 )

My Dear Mick
You nailed "it" you have a native observation, that is a birth write...this is good, my friend...I thought this was f'in A...
Huuummm, I've said, is I Huuummm, girl, has depths of thought that most times, just reels me in to a form of reality...Mick, thanks my Dear,
for the "nice, good informative, past the moon, to travels beyond the sun, in the place of the truest of revelations"...enjoy, more revelatios
will enhance, yet you already knew this...

Thank You, Friend............Robinbird

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: June 4, 2005 )

Thanks John & Robin
Thanks John and Robinbird.

Yes one's enough. John. I read those type of books for an adventure and if love happens along, well, who am I to say no?

I look for a mystery or an interesting theory that has been explored. I think I want some escapism and to be intellectually stimulated. Battles between good and evil, tend to dominate over romantic stories in these genres. Thanks for stopping to comment.

Thanks Robin. I'm glad you enjoy the journeys and that they take you to a place where your own revelations can surface. Thanks for your continued support Robinbird, my feathered friend.


( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: June 5, 2005 )

thanks persephone
And you are surely a women of your word, Real Persephone. Thanks for your comments here. Glad you enjoyed this one. It came out of the Tarot series I have been working on but went in a different direction than I had hoped origonally. So I married that idea to one I had been tossing around for a while and this trippy little number came out. Thanks for dropping by Lady P.

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: June 15, 2005 )

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