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hazy afternoon
swallows, like spirits risen
stirred in the branches


a pale granite plinth
kissed by the drooping cedars,
silent in the park

crystal face I kiss
tongue tastes like sweet cold rain
I fall into pond

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The following comments are for "Peace"

Peace to you , too, Peter
Had to look up 'plinth'. Wow. For English as a second (or third) language you do more with it than I do with it as my first.
Have not had a chance to look at your 'Five Children' yet, although I got your note today. I know when I get there it will be a soul wrencher, so I want to go when I can give it adequate honor.
You are a beautiful soul Peter.

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: May 23, 2005 )

Lovely, Peter!
You evoked such a calm, serene picture with this Peter...well done.


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: May 24, 2005 )

peace stirrer
Hi Peter,

Very nice and peaceful, but I'm wondering about the 1st word of the 3rd line of the Stanza 1. "Stir" might be better than "stirred". See what you and others think??

The second stanza is my favourite. The cedars reaching over to kiss the plinth is a very captivating image. Excellent emotive work, Peter


( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: May 24, 2005 )

Peter, lo pequeno es hermoso
Maravilloso poetsia.

I like this very much Peter. Glad you posted, missed you around.

Darlene ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: May 24, 2005 )

Peter's "Peace"
Peter: Bravo!...Glad to read you again.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: May 24, 2005 )

Thank you very much for reading! I agree with you Mick, I will be editing soon. :)

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: May 25, 2005 )

Damn . . .
. . . you've got one hell of a vocabulary and you know how to use it. A peaceful poem about peace that induces peacefulness in the reader.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: May 25, 2005 )

A very gently expressed serenity.....lovely write Peter~

( Posted by: ADannon [Member] On: May 25, 2005 )

Viper and Dannon
Viper! Heh, if you remember commenting on my old, old poem I Love, I already used the word 'drooping' there, plus many times in my other poems that are not published here. If you are then talking about 'plinth' well... uhm I guess I am just lucky I came across that word in a book I read. :0) Thank you pal!

Dannon, thanks a lot girl! I appreciate your reading these haiku. :)

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: May 26, 2005 )

Nice interludes
Well-captured moments.

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: June 18, 2005 )

John, Peace
Peace, brother! Thank you for reading this. :0)

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: June 18, 2005 )

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