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One day
I saw it in your eyes
I couldn't help but just stare
Your fool was in suprise
Those days I longed to hold you
And touch your lips to mine
A life like this is just like
A shot of turpentine

There we were
The night above
Our breath entwined
And I whispered love
I looked in you
I showed the ring
I held you close
I felt you leave

You said
"I think that I should leave
I wanted entertainment
And it's too deep for me
Now, I really enjoyed this
But it's not what I want
I don't want to keep you here
In something you don't want"


You screwed me
Way over
Lead me on
Took over
Cut me off
Ruined my life
I love you
Be my wife



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The following comments are for "Turpentine (Song)"
by Montanna

geez u've been through something else with girls... i like the song though.

( Posted by: polkadot* [Member] On: September 10, 2001 )

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