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The ship pitches forward
Into the black water.
The deck band plays stubbornly
In the face of Death.
Because that's what deck bands do,
They play.

Tonight there is one other thing,
Tonight everyone dies.
Each person plays a private solo
That speaks of dispair and fear and loss.
Then everyone dies.

Their little world that has run
Always parellel to the water,
Dark, light, still or rush,
Always parellel,
Tonight slips into the acute,
Then momentarily into obtuse horror.

And from there to nothing,
Into silence and death,
Into a water-filled void
Echoing the songs of whales,
Who don't need a deck band.
Where Iceburgs float overhead,
Like clouds.

Here alone the little band
Yet lifts up in spirit
A hymn to God.

------
Paul Godfrey


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The following comments are for "The Deck Band"
by SamPark

My Lonely Pick of the Day, Sampark...
Paul I read this twice and I have shivers. I watched parts of the Movie Titanic the other day. There was also a story covered here in Canada of the sinking on the St. Lawrence Seaway. Then someone I know was talking of the loss of the Fitzgerald. I find it ironic that I am skimming through the Lonely posts to find this.
A hidden treasure, that I am glad I found waiting here to be read once again and commented.
Paul your writing is always interesting. I have read you since I joined and never once felt let down.

This is such a nice tribute to many of those "unsung" heroes that are so often overlooked, forgotten until that date. That special date that brings the anniversary of death, and SO many deaths right in front of our faces.

Very tightly written. I like how you wrote this very much and you captured it with great visuals, and a wonderful ending.

Thanks for sharing this Paul.

Megwetch,
Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: May 31, 2005 )

Dead Sea Poems
Darlene! Thanks for rescuing my wayward poem. And thank you for your comments! I just sat here for the last five hours re-reading them before I thought to copy them and hand them out to all my relatives. One doesn't get to read that many nice things about his poems very often, and I thank you for going to the trouble to read and comment. Thank You.

( Posted by: SamPark [Member] On: May 31, 2005 )

a full deck
I also liked this Sampark. I thought you made full use of imagery and angles of intersecting loci. Focusing on the band still playing though they know their deaths await in the icy sea was a great choice and I liked the image of the bergs as clouds. Excellent write.
cheers
mick

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: June 1, 2005 )





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