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I need help. They tell me that until Iím ready to help myself, no one can. I donít know if Iím capable of that. While its going on, I love it. The smell is what gets me. The groove. The party. What boys from Missouri want..New Mexico...itís in your eyes. Despite my solitary madness, remember through it all I love you.


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The following comments are for "Last words of a madman"
by Robert Walker

off-target
Because it is a brief piece that is necessarily short with details, you need to hit each point you want to pass on directly. I liked the atmosphere of the poem and enjoyed the read, but felt that I didn't have enough to know all I need to. Longer might help, but only with more impact. Thanks.

( Posted by: SamPark [Member] On: May 19, 2005 )

hope not off note

This has a touch of a suicide note Robert, it is a bit disturbing, however I know you are still around since you have written since then.

I know where you are coming from, and as off target stated, I like your details and how you create the atmosphere well.

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: May 25, 2005 )





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