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feed the flame of love
truth respect accept thus to
merge body mind soul

Robinbird


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The following comments are for "Soul Mates"
by Robinbird

soul mates
Hi Robin,

Cool haiku, but I'm wondering about "thus" on the second line. It worked better for me with "this".
The first line was my favourite here.

Alternatively for line 2, if you made it "acceptance"

"feed the flame of love
truth respect acceptance to
merge body mind soul"

or something like that?? See what you think.

cheers
mick

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

smithy...
I do like that much better, reads better, writing my haiku thoughts,reminds me of grammar school, counting syllables with my fingers...

thanks much Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

Acceptance
robinbird: "free your mind and the rest will follow". i apologize for the frequency of quotes to your work, lately. this haiku is difficult for me to accept on the level of content, but if i think about the thoughts behind it exclusively, i find myself at a greater level of understanding. that is enough for me to transcend.

i enjoyed this.

( Posted by: skulduggery [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

skul...
i appreciate your comments, and instruct anyway you can...means much to me...
skul...welcome to my thread always, and i love constructive thoughts...
you are a.ok, visit often, i enjoy much your thoughts...Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

Dem...
appreciate you dropping in, not feeling especially well, last day or two, but have something to talk about, I'll PM you...it's all good.

Thanks again, Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: May 19, 2005 )

soul mate
a few words with great meanings ..I like the third line much..but I dont know if something wrong in the second....I cannot dig out what is wrong exactly..


( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: May 20, 2005 )

Haiku
Hi, Robin, your SOULMATES looks like a haiku but it may not be acceptable to many people in the USA as haiku.
You may like to read some very fine haiku published in LYNX (www.ahapoetry.com). You may also like to subscribe to haiku emailed daily from tinywords.com.
Like you, I too have been a learner, as far as haiku and tanka are concerned, and am pleased to share with you where one reads some real good haiku.

( Posted by: R.K.Singh [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

R.K. Singh...,
hey Sing...So, So So...good to see you on my
"thing" called, "thread"...just tickled to see YOU! haven't talked enough lately...my scedule
is so busy, I'm moving hopefully next week, just my 7yr boy and myself...I have 1 book started and I have began investigatio's on another, corruption of local bullshit politics, I know you far, far away but shit happen's everywhere.. you know, i just don't know your know...
I plan to have my book completed by winter, my birthday, dec30, oh i'm quite tenacious and high spirited...it will happen, furthermore, i have a publisher, ready to rock and roll....amazing
enough, someone turned him in to the little, simple poetry, he liked...but, he said she's missing her calling...if you feel it., and know it DO IT!

Sing...you have been very good to be, i can't forget kindness...hope someday, our paths will cross...

thanks much...Robinbird (Robin)

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: June 4, 2005 )

like smithy's comment
Like this Haiku but I guess you should switch to Smithy's version in his comment.
Cheers

( Posted by: seyekuyinu [Member] On: June 22, 2005 )





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