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Heron male
Arcs around slowly
Flies to her

Uber Alles


The following comments are for "3, 5, 3 Experiment"
by skulduggery

Jorge, Syllables
jorge: i know there are several views on this. it has been my research that has made me agree with you. i have it on good advise that your opinion is valid. i hesitated to call this haiku, however, to spare any potential argument. is see that it is a volatile situation here at

this was inspired by another haiku i read about herons. i see these frequently on my commute. the male and female are crossing over the river in opposing directions, widely spaced. i believe they are flying together, but he always comes around to her in his slow, lumbering flight pattern. it's lovely, really.

thank you for comment. i appreciate it.

( Posted by: skulduggery [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

Skul: Birds of a ....
Skul: Glad to see you remain in our space..

Fly free...

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

bobby7l: i'm glad you read this. your trend for writing in this 3, 5, 3; along with others following suit, has led me to try my hand as well. i am gleaning a lot by influence here, and appreciate this site for what it has lent me.

( Posted by: skulduggery [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

Hi Skul...Nice
this turned out to be a nice experiment and what a good title to use, drew me in with that and I wasn't let down. Like this flying Haiku.
Darlene ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

dareva: thank you for the compliment. if i were convinced in the beginning that this was a true haiku, i would have titled it in order with my last. since i was uncertain, i meant only to inform the reader of my intention. i'm very glad you enjoyed it.

( Posted by: skulduggery [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

anything that envokes a, huuummmh, from myself brings great thought...personally, this is my fav yet that changes, i love short sweet reads,
this is good, babe...liked it much...


( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: May 17, 2005 )

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