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Commit Me

Some sins are too beautiful not to commit;
If I could fall like Achilles,
Icarus, or Sisyphus,
In ways deamed appropriate by the masters
And petrified with time
In ironic grace and frightening beauty,
I would foster my fatal flaw.
To make failure a choice,
You must choose wisely
Amongst the thorns of the multifoliate rose,
And the shards of a shattered Pandora's box
Or else find your fatal flight ends
As a broken bird; a beaten, lifeless,
Feathered lump, spattered in colors that speak
Of vivacity
Rather than preserved in pages of parchment
Eternally immortalized as a scene of tragic beauty;
The moral to the story,
Clean of all dirty details of daily living.
It is the envy of ending that endures
The empty's effortless existences.

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She falls softly down from towering pedastools...


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The following comments are for "Commit Me"
by shefallssoftly

Very tasty (for want of a better word)
I love this. It's, in my opinion, the best poem of your I've read. I love the draws on greek mythology, something I myself have a particular interest in.

I was also pleased to read your reply to my comment. Yes I am 18. It's fun.

What i especially like about this is the length. I can't stand long poems as i feel that what you say at the start can never match what is being stated at the end, taking away from the poem's influence. (Effortless is a brilliant word.)

Adam.

( Posted by: Thea Veol [Member] On: May 22, 2005 )





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