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Commit Me

Some sins are too beautiful not to commit;
If I could fall like Achilles,
Icarus, or Sisyphus,
In ways deamed appropriate by the masters
And petrified with time
In ironic grace and frightening beauty,
I would foster my fatal flaw.
To make failure a choice,
You must choose wisely
Amongst the thorns of the multifoliate rose,
And the shards of a shattered Pandora's box
Or else find your fatal flight ends
As a broken bird; a beaten, lifeless,
Feathered lump, spattered in colors that speak
Of vivacity
Rather than preserved in pages of parchment
Eternally immortalized as a scene of tragic beauty;
The moral to the story,
Clean of all dirty details of daily living.
It is the envy of ending that endures
The empty's effortless existences.

She falls softly down from towering pedastools...

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The following comments are for "Commit Me"
by shefallssoftly

Very tasty (for want of a better word)
I love this. It's, in my opinion, the best poem of your I've read. I love the draws on greek mythology, something I myself have a particular interest in.

I was also pleased to read your reply to my comment. Yes I am 18. It's fun.

What i especially like about this is the length. I can't stand long poems as i feel that what you say at the start can never match what is being stated at the end, taking away from the poem's influence. (Effortless is a brilliant word.)


( Posted by: Thea Veol [Member] On: May 22, 2005 )

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