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My secrets are always here,
My lies are always in your ears,
My innocents is only to the face,
The truth is real, but you'll never here,
The it perices deeper why can't you see it?
The skin is broken, but you'll never know,
My heart is broken in two, the pain is deading,
The slilence slows my heart, the beat ends.

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The following comments are for "Lies"
by heartbreakersbeware

Lies
This is a good read but there is one thing that didnít appeal to me maybe a typo "The it perices deeper why can't you see it?" that line doesnít run smooth. Maybe itís just me.
I check all my writing with word before submitting to help with grammar and spelling I noticed a few errors. I am in high school too Iím a freshman this is a good site to get involved with.

PoetFreak

( Posted by: poetfreak [Member] On: May 16, 2005 )

Thanks
Thank you for the comment! I'll be sure to take it in to account and for the tip! I just have trouble spelling if you haven't noticed!
Laura

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 16, 2005 )

Lies
Donít worry the first thing I posted were much worse than that, I have difficulties with spelling too. Keep up the good work.

PoetFreak

( Posted by: poetfreak [Member] On: May 18, 2005 )





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