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Universe
began with big bang
ends with whimper

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"A foolish consistency is the hobgoblin of little minds, adored by little statesman and philosophers and divines. With consistency a great soul has simply nothing to do."

- Ralph 'Where's Waldo' Emerson




"I don't know half of you half as well as I should like. And I like less than half of you half as well as you deserve."
- Bilbo Baggins













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The following comments are for "entropy"
by drsoos

Entropy
True, true. You basically summed up the second law of thermodynamics right there. nice job.

( Posted by: malthis [Member] On: May 14, 2005 )

big bang

I gather you are not an Evangelist.

Good write,

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: May 14, 2005 )

doctor
I've gotta be a little harsh and say I think this one doesn't quite make it. For me, it's too reminicent of "in like a lion and out like a lamb." But, hey, I always enjoy reading what you write.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: May 14, 2005 )

ends with whimper...
...could describe this piece. I will try again as "entropy 2".

I agree this falls shy. Your criticism is lamb-like gentle, not harsh at all, and welcome. Appreciations are, as always, appreciated as well.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: May 16, 2005 )

entropy, from it you cannot divorce
you know the TS Eliot poem "Hollow Men"?
it ends with these lines
"this is the way the world ends
this is the way the world ends
this is the way the world ends
not with a bang but a whimper"

i really like this, but i would like it better if it was less haiku style and either a haiku, or not a haiku.

( Posted by: ruina [Member] On: May 16, 2005 )

ruina/T S Entropy
I guess that was certainly bouncing around in the back of my mind at the time. I hate to classify something as haiku when it isn't, we have enough controversy as it is. I tried again with Enrtopy 2. I posted it as Haiku, with one word changed. I think it works better- do you?

Thanks to you and to all who read & hugs to commenters.

s

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: June 1, 2005 )

Drsos nice to make your acquaintance.
Love your bio...read this little poem and can't say I am familiar with this format...but message I think that is the evolution theory--old history lol..the ending is yours uniquely.

( Posted by: ladyngold [Member] On: June 2, 2005 )





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