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Starlight shining in the sky
bestow your gifts on thoes who cry.
Give them all the strength they need
to pass their day without a grief.
Help them make their wish come true,
you think of me and I see you.
Listen and watch their sad tears fall,
the still night silence broken with sobs.
So to all who wish on stars,
this twinkling light will heal your scars.


The following comments are for "Stars"
by Konnformer

just a thought
not bad. Though I think dropping the connectives (and to the) might make it a little bit tighter.

( Posted by: bhagwandave [Member] On: May 11, 2005 )

bhagwandave, thank you for the tip. I'll be sure to use it.

( Posted by: konnformer [Member] On: May 11, 2005 )

I think I've hear that poem before it was really good better than I could do! I'll be posting some poems soon come and see mine! There not as good as yours!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

Aas a writer I know you never write anything without feeling, who was it about?

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

Good Job ^ ^
There is a nice little rhyme to this little poem. I like seems to have a sense of mystery as to why everyones sad. And it's not really straight forward and thats what I like about it.

( Posted by: BelovedGreatWolf [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

to all
TO:heartbreakersbeware: I'll be sure to do that! Although, you shouldn't compare poetry... your's may have a different style, different drift..really, there is no BETTER..again, i'll check them out! As to who it was, I was peaceful that day...most of my poety is cold and dark...I'll post thoes soon tho.
TO:BelovedGreatWolf:You like the mystery? Check out the other poems I have! But, thanks for the comment!

( Posted by: Konnformer [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

You still
You still didn't say who it was about??? B/c it has to be about someone!!!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

What I ment
It sound like one of my friend speoms not my own! It's like I know you! B/c he's writen a peom like that before and his name is Vicne like yours! Is there any connection??? I don't know! But I've got to go!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

You must be playing with my head LAURA! Lol...yea, this is Vince..but shhhh...its a secret. Yea. finally found a site to publish m poems, and my story. To bad I left all my poems at home x_X E-mail me, lets not have a conversation here.
-Vince Kramer

( Posted by: Konnformer [Member] On: May 13, 2005 )

You peom has feelings, as do I,
But you don't see me in the back of your mind! I want you to hold me tight, ubt all you do is forget me with time
Vince your poems made me fall for you even more ! but you took the prize,but what am I now in your eyes!!
I'm grounded it's true, but you've never even tryed!! write me back on!! cause I can't geton email!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: November 30, 2005 )

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