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Starlight shining in the sky
bestow your gifts on thoes who cry.
Give them all the strength they need
to pass their day without a grief.
Help them make their wish come true,
you think of me and I see you.
Listen and watch their sad tears fall,
the still night silence broken with sobs.
So to all who wish on stars,
this twinkling light will heal your scars.



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The following comments are for "Stars"
by Konnformer

just a thought
not bad. Though I think dropping the connectives (and to the) might make it a little bit tighter.

( Posted by: bhagwandave [Member] On: May 11, 2005 )

thanks
bhagwandave, thank you for the tip. I'll be sure to use it.

( Posted by: konnformer [Member] On: May 11, 2005 )

Heys
Wow,
I think I've hear that poem before it was really good better than I could do! I'll be posting some poems soon come and see mine! There not as good as yours!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

P.S.
Aas a writer I know you never write anything without feeling, who was it about?

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

Good Job ^ ^
There is a nice little rhyme to this little poem. I like it...it seems to have a sense of mystery as to why everyones sad. And it's not really straight forward and thats what I like about it.

( Posted by: BelovedGreatWolf [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

to all
TO:heartbreakersbeware: I'll be sure to do that! Although, you shouldn't compare poetry... your's may have a different style, different drift..really, there is no BETTER..again, i'll check them out! As to who it was to...hm..actually, I was peaceful that day...most of my poety is cold and dark...I'll post thoes soon tho.
TO:BelovedGreatWolf:You like the mystery? Check out the other poems I have! But, thanks for the comment!

( Posted by: Konnformer [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

You still
You still didn't say who it was about??? B/c it has to be about someone!!!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

What I ment
It sound like one of my friend speoms not my own! It's like I know you! B/c he's writen a peom like that before and his name is Vicne like yours! Is there any connection??? I don't know! But I've got to go!
Bye

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

...
You must be playing with my head LAURA! Lol...yea, this is Vince..but shhhh...its a secret. Yea. finally found a site to publish m poems, and my story. To bad I left all my poems at home x_X E-mail me, lets not have a conversation here.
-Vince Kramer

( Posted by: Konnformer [Member] On: May 13, 2005 )

...
You peom has feelings, as do I,
But you don't see me in the back of your mind! I want you to hold me tight, ubt all you do is forget me with time
Vince your poems made me fall for you even more ! but you took the prize,but what am I now in your eyes!!
I'm grounded it's true, but you've never even tryed!! write me back on lit.org!! cause I can't geton email!

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: November 30, 2005 )





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