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The ship tanked our escort out
nervous soldiers carried doubt,
four days mission held secure
sweat and courage stains endure.
Nazi claimed their Normandy to spoil the taste of wine,
knive disquised as broken glass
crawling sideways near the blast,
our captin rushed the enemy leaving none behind.

The green light dropped us in SNAFU
among the streets the war waged through,
orders were sent beyond units
triggers pulled the pins and bullets.
Radio frecquency called for a sweep over ground,
under smoke of turret shells
screaming soldiers crawl for help,
the silver plate is memeory to silence broken down.

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Open and read the pages of my DarkerMind
where one's style of writing comes from deep within.
I don't plan to change the world; just trying to leave my mark.


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The following comments are for "DDay at the Beach"
by KingDon

Too good for lonely entry
The subject matter is good. It certainly shouldn't be in lonely entry limbo. But the power and meaning of the poem are hurt by about a half-dozen spelling errors. Poems are too compact to contain them without damage. Look at "knive disquised" then find a good spell check. You will get a big boost in your poem's power for a small effort.

( Posted by: SamPark [Member] On: May 31, 2005 )





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