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I, the Rose

A bulb; deep, warm, safe
pushing out and up to the sun.
Wind and rain lashing me
I continue to grow up and out
exquisite and alive.

------
Keith


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The following comments are for "I, the Rose"
by Dfortyseven

Hey Mr. Roses


This is also quite charming too, liked it very much, precise and uncomplicated.


macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: May 10, 2005 )

budding poet
Sounds like a budding poet if ever I heard one. I agree with macbeth, quite charming is a very good description.
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: May 10, 2005 )

sweet rose
I like it too. It can be anything from a real description of a budding rose to a child relishing youth to anybody finally coming to terms with him/herself.

:)

( Posted by: maimai [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

Too much rose
This is a fine poem. It takes you deep into the earth. Then it ejects you out into the sun. Into the storm of daylight and being.

I would take out "I am the Rose" from the last line. That way it would highlight the best phrase in the poem, "exquisite and alive."

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

I really
I really like the more vague aspects of this poem. I'd suggest disguising it a little more, from either or both sides (the rose and the person).

( Posted by: Thwancondu [Member] On: May 18, 2005 )

I, the Rose
Since most of you-liked-it, I understand, a review and a rating is redundant. Have to remember that the next time I review.

( Posted by: keith1123 [Member] On: May 18, 2005 )





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