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before you all read, i have a question....

i get confused between the meaning of a rant and a poem. like i think rants are angry pieces that you write to get stuff off your chest, and it doesn't matter what form it's in. i've always considered a rant either a piece of writing, sorta like an essay with no true order or a poem with no true order. i dunno if i'm making sense. tell me to explain myself more if you'd like. if you understand, tell me if i'm wrong.

wow... i haven't posted for a while. sorry about that. i bet everyone was happy anyway without me. anywho, now you can read...

--

"Too Many Bruises to Count"

i was kicked
and i bled
i was left here
left for dead
they forgot to
check my pulse
somewhere deep
under my skin
please don't tell me
there is hope
because i see no light
please don't tell me
you love me cause you don't
you're wrong i'm right
tired of the white lies
tired now of being me
tired of the selfishness
tired of existing.
tired of you saying shit
to comfort me
something i don't need
when i want to leave
tired of dying
in front of my eyes
and tired of you sitting back
and just watching
i hear you say
in distance
too afraid to get close enough
to say it
"maybe if you try and forget what they say,
maybe things will get better...
maybe things will be okay."
--maybe not.



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The following comments are for "Too Many Bruises to Count"
by Veruca Salt

wow!
thanks alot :o) that cleared things up for me.

( Posted by: Veruca Salt [Member] On: July 1, 2002 )

Nice, very Nice
This was a very powerful piece. My fave line was:
"Tired of you saying shit
to comfort me"

Very evocative. Nice imagery. Yeah, I would tend to see this as an angry poem, rather than a rant.

Keep up the good work!

--Jasmine

( Posted by: Jasmine [Member] On: July 1, 2002 )

Nice
Veruca Salt,

Very nice poem - yes I would not call this a rant either. Glad you posted it, I enjoyed the read.

Later,
Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: July 1, 2002 )

Eloquence...
Terrifically eloquent! I can't help but worry, though. It is real enough for me to be certain that you've been there and may be there now. A good poem, though.

( Posted by: The Recycled Avatar [Member] On: July 3, 2002 )





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