Write Off: Spit it out
by Jessicanm (Member) - published: June 30, 2002
Word Count: 90 Word Bytes: 606 Viewed: 1487 times
Category - The Write Off
© Copyright by Jessicanm

(1 votes)

Rating	Rated by

8	Unknown

You must login to vote

Hindered by something untouchable.
Struggling, grasping for the right phrase,
the right adjective, noun, or verb.
It's there on the tip of my tongue,
Crouching at the edge of my brain.
Can't seem to shake it, spit it out or swallow.
Roll it around, try to chew.
Nothing seems to help.
Pounding keys furiously
Words of nonsense and rubbish coat the screen.
It doesn't fit, doesn't work,
There's no flow, no heat.
No smooth release of thoughts to dialog.
Frustration running high,
Delete, backspace the mess,
Scratch and start again.

------
Jessica@Lit.Org or Jessicamg@gmail.com

~How vain it is to sit down and write when you have not stood up to live.~

Henry David Thoreau

Related Items

A Custom Blend

More by Jessicanm »

Comments

The following comments are for "Write Off: Spit it out"
by Jessicanm

jubei's ju-jubes
Tangible! Especially since we're all writers in this electronic domain, and also since I would've written something of this sort if I hadn't had a flash of inspiration (not to in any way downgrade your poem, I think it @#$^%ing rocks!).

( Posted by: Rogan [Member] On: June 30, 2002 )

Warning: mysql_fetch_array(): supplied argument is not a valid MySQL result resource in /home/lit/public_html/do.php on line 1995

And the winner is...
Ok, you not be the winner of the competition, but you did take away my highest mark for the competion. Your piece most clearly gets across the feeling of frustration. This probably isn't the best piece of poetry in the competion, no offence Jessica, but it does what it is supposed to do. You read it and say, "I know exactly how you feel."
Good job!

( Posted by: Apathy's tears [Member] On: July 1, 2002 )

Great minds...
Once again rogan's reading my mind before it even engages on the subject.. in truth I'm starting to think the Thought Police might be in his employ, but I digress... I too considered and even started to write up a piece on this very aspect of the writer's craft. You handled the subject with a deft touch, and as Apathy's Tears already said you accomplished the goal we all strive for, the empathy of shared experience.. Great job as always...

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: July 1, 2002 )

Aww, thanks
Apathy did you know you're my favorite writer now? ;) Just joking, seriously though thanks for the rating and the comments. And I have to agree with you on the piece, its not the greatest in the contest its not one of my greatest works either. I had fun with this though and I'm glad you liked it enough to give me the winning score.

Rogan, I'm glad you think it rocks, the reason I wrote on this piece was because I couldn't think of anything else to write about for the write off and got frustrated and then, ta da, it all came together.

Bartleby, what can I say, you've always rated/read my stuff and supported me no matter how crappy the piece truly is. Thanks for the encouragment and always truthful though at times hard for me to take, comments.

~Jessica

( Posted by: Jessicanm [Member] On: July 1, 2002 )

good stuff
I think this peice best captures the concept of frustration, and does it in a way that this audience can really relate. Good Work!

( Posted by: kross [Member] On: July 2, 2002 )

Comparison shopping
I've waited a bit to rate this one. I looked at the piece I tried to do on the same subject and lets just say I didn't do near as good of a job as you did. So with that said, here's my two cents.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: July 3, 2002 )

Nice
True enough, you may not have written the most outstanding piece. However, my limited southern brain cells love the simplicity and easy interpretation of this poem. In short, you've done the best job at expressing the element of frustration.

( Posted by: Khazra3829 [Member] On: July 4, 2002 )

re: Spit it out

Good poem. Not great, but good. I liked it quite a bit in the context of this write off. I think you got the message across well though I dislike fourth all type stuff - usually. I did dig it overall.

( Posted by: crowe [Admin] On: July 7, 2002 )

Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Login:
Password:

Related Sites:

Free Advertising
*Web Advertising
*Free Advertising
*Turbo Tax software
*Advertising