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sat across from one another in a cheap motel, staring at each other beneath our many collective eyelashes, but your mascara obscured my view, so i fell into a cheap coma just to spite me; i don't know, but under the blanket of you just won't shut up and your too much makeup, it all becomes clear: otherwise, it's a lovely day.

take my picture and make me so immortal, 'cause life through a camera shutter is just so much fun: selective slices of lives, a certain je ne sais quoi, yeah.

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by verve

i dont read much poetry
but i liked this. Reminds me of an atmosphere song. I liked the paragraphed style.

( Posted by: jack [Member] On: December 22, 2003 )

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