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I look across the vast ocean, ocean of blood
All I can hear are the scream of dying men in pain
This stench of I can’t say what is unbearable
I walk over the bodies and sort threw them one by one
All of there faces covered with the same look of dread
I can’t find his face no matter where I look
I start to feel tipsy light in the head
All of these bodies naked in the sun
I see his face covered in mud
I try to wake him by shaking him about
But he is just to tired too tired too take his face out of the mud
He is to tired too breath or blink his eyes
I am going to go find mama maybe she can wake him
Then as I smell it again I realize that smell is the smell of the dead

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Inspired by The Sabine Women, 1799, by Jacques-Louis David, in the Louvre, Paris(photo: Bridgeman Art Library)



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by poetfreak

Hey me agian
I don't know what to say about this one, it doesn't appeal to my taste as the others did, but I can't say that it is bad! I don't know what were you thinking when you wrote this peom???? becasue there has to be a reason you worte then maybe I can give you some tips!
heartbreakersbeware

( Posted by: heartbreakersbeware [Member] On: May 13, 2005 )

The Stench
In this piece I was trying some thing I haven’t done before. I was trying to tell the poem from the Childs eyes. The painting The Sabine Women is a war scene. This is all I can really say about what I was thinking.

PoetFreak

( Posted by: poetfreak [Member] On: May 16, 2005 )





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