Lit.Org - a community for readers and writers Advanced Search
 




Average Rating
9

(1 votes)


RatingRated by
9Myth

You must login to vote

Author's Note:
This is part 2 to a 5 part suite based off of T.S. Eliot's poem "The Hollow Men." Part one was "The Hollow Men."



I’ve loved you from the first
Day, every freckle on your face,
Every silly thing you say,
I think as I watch you push against
The air, swinging desperately
Behaving as the wind behaves.
And I remember moments
That wash over each other
Again, and again like watercolor
Dipped on plain white paper,
Creating something deeper,
Colors etched into the snow.
I remember the place
We always went at midnight
On Fridays, when everyone
Thought we were sleeping
We would sit in that old park
On squeaky swings and laugh
While the colors shined too brightly
Like watercolors, starkly streaked
Across plain white paper,
Like scenes of perfect reconciliation
Drawn into a comic book.
I remember that moment in a thousand
Variations, for each of a thousand
Times we went there, and a thousand
And one times we kissed goodnight,
As the starlight danced in your eyes.
And after swimming in all those moments,
The colors marking me like watercolor
On plain white paper,
I remember that tonight is the last time
The last time in this beat up park
The last time with legs too long for these swings
The last time we’d kiss goodnight–
But you look at me, your eyes shining so bright
Like watercolor on plain white paper,
And I smiled with all my might and thought
Not that final meeting
In the twilight kingdom

------
She falls softly down from towering pedastools...


Related Items

Comments

The following comments are for "The Twilight Kingdom"
by shefallssoftly

twilight kingdom
Nice Casey. i liked the use of watercolor here. I've read it a few times and I still can't quite get the ending. I figure you are thinking about the meeting in the twilight kingdom but the last two lines are a little unclear to me? I enjoyed it the more I read it too but maybe one too many "on plain white paper" lines or something feels strange with them? See what you think.
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: May 3, 2005 )





Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Commenting Guidelines:
  • All comments must be about the writing. Non-related comments will be deleted.
  • Flaming, derogatory or messages attacking other members well be deleted.
  • Adult/Sexual comments or messages will be deleted.
  • All subjects MUST be PG. No cursing in subjects.
  • All comments must follow the sites posting guidelines.
The purpose of commenting on Lit.Org is to help writers improve their writing. Please post constructive feedback to help the author improve their work.


Username:
Password:
Subject:
Comment:





Login:
Password: