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Wanting the best
Not beating the rest
Commanding with no heart
We really fell apart
Leave us alone for one painstaking year
The point of heart breaking is very near
We all know our grades
And we'll keep them that way
But beware the truth
For you know of your fate
But before everything fades
We have just one thing to say
Beware of your children
You might not wake up one day

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The following comments are for "The Plea"
by MortalAngel

there is to much rhyming in your poems. it kills me. make some of them were they don't rhyme.

( Posted by: mandilynn89 [Member] On: May 9, 2005 )

mandi mandi mandi

( Posted by: MortalAngel [Member] On: May 9, 2005 )

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