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My words of you, now, are hollow of
Feeling as yours are full of mock-reverence
As my heart was once, for you--
Red herrings, smoke and mirrors,
Cheap glitter instead of starlight--
Don't you see?
It's all for you.
Do you see me
Now that I've stopped wearing
The perfect mask and bearing
The winged shoes you made me?
Can you see me now
That I have fallen, crashed violently
From a counterfeit heaven you fashioned
Or am I below your sightline?
Yes, once I let you make me;
Blank as canvas and begging
Yearning to taste your spurious perfection--
And now I scrub your paint off my cheeks
Until the rough cloth scours my skin a natural red
I hate it, and I hate you for covering it
Disgusted by who I am and who I ought to be,
Ashamed, eternally scrubbing infernal wax
Melted rivulets infinitely dripping down my back.
But I don't know how to describe that
In the face of your inevitable pseudo-brilliance.
I know that one day, your pretended profound mind
Will recall me, and write deceptively deeply
Long and melancholy, and you'll say
She was perfect once, when she was mine,
Heaven and holy grace in her face
Framed perfection in her words
She was glorious and even
When she falls
She falls softly

------
She falls softly down from towering pedastools...


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The following comments are for "She Falls Softly"
by shefallssoftly

shespringsback...

...as herself! Your words fall softly.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: April 29, 2005 )

drsoos
That they are, that they are. A rather personal piece, I think. Thanks for dropping by.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: April 30, 2005 )

First person
The only type of poetry that I can manage to write is from the first person view. Here you took the first person view and made it so interesting for me. I really like your writing.

( Posted by: underthewillow [Member] On: June 2, 2005 )

shefallssoftly
Casey,
Your words speak to my heart poignantly.
Your star shines brightly evermore. Your light finds its true home. Shine on. Bev

( Posted by: starrynight [Member] On: July 18, 2005 )





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