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she doesn't even know
but I know
she doesn't even care
but I care
she doesn't even feel
but I feel
she doesn't even look
but I look
she doesn't even cry
but I cry
She doesn't even love
but I love (her)


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by ZonerZone

Zoner - this kind of love
A lot of people have experienced this kind of love at some point.

Perhaps you should approach her and ask her for a date?

Or, is it a "star-crossed-lovers" thing?

Thanks for sharing this poem with us. I enjoyed reading it.

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 28, 2005 )

Felicia (her) I can't
I'm glad you liked it. She's in one of my classes and I might ask her one of these days I guess. Thinking of her made me write this poem is all I'm saying.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: April 28, 2005 )

puppy love

Gosh, I would hate to be in your position ever again.

Glad you posted it.

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: April 28, 2005 )

i liked it
i really enjoyed this poem , i can relate and im sure that other feel the same way.

( Posted by: VinceClarke241 [Member] On: April 30, 2005 )

Thanks.
Vinceclarke241 and macbeth thanks.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: May 2, 2005 )

Her
Ask her!! Talk to her!! You don't get unless you ask. She may be thinking the same...you never know! And if she says no, oh well....We are all just flavors of ice cream. You may not be her flavor but you're still delicous ice cream!!

( Posted by: Meghanc [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

Zone...
she just might know, give it a shot, agree with
Meghan...Also enjoyed Becky...

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: May 12, 2005 )

is very good
i like it mate. your on your way. word of advis, go with your gut and do what you want in life. you might die today so if you die why not die with style? ;) thats how i live my life mate and i gota tell ya, its one h.e.l.l of a party mate. ;) keep it real mate ;)
ftmthasme

( Posted by: ftmthasme [Member] On: May 24, 2005 )

Thanks.
Meghanc, Robinbird, and ftmthasme thanks.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

zoner

Your comments crack me up...you dunno what I am talking about right? So, did you ask her out?

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

yah.
I did and she was cool about it. We hang. Just wrote her another poem tonight. This will be the third poem I wrote for her. Thanks for asking.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

zoner

Well, I'm glad for you, and I'll keep on eye out on your work. I was reading some of your other stuff and comments and I was laughing in a good way. It's good to read work from people that don't take themselves so damn seriously if you know what I mean.

macbeth

( Posted by: macbeth [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

poem
wow. You have such huge balls online, but as usual face to face is another story. Take it form me dude ask her out....the worst that can happen is she tells you to take a flying leap. On second thought that may not be too bad.
rw

( Posted by: robert walker [Member] On: July 1, 2005 )





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