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Shipwrecked in the Sands of Time

We lost our senses (But that's okay)
We lost ourselves (But that's okay)
We lost our love (But that's okay)
I lost you, and I'll never be okay

We can fix this if we just
Work together
We can work this out if we just
Think things through

Shipwrecked in the sands of time
Desert sun beats down on your face
Thousands of grains sweep with grace
While ours stay still, what a crime

I volunteered my heart to your cause
It must have gotten lost in pain
My adrenaline flowed out in vain
At least make me worth what was

(Whispered)
We can fix this if we just
Work together
We can work things out if we just
Think things through

Shipwrecked in the sands of time
Desert sun beats down on your face
Thousands of grains sweep with grace
While ours stay still, what a crime

------
Alex, The boy full of ideas



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The following comments are for "Shipwrecked in the Sands of Time"
by amusedlilboy

Good
Nice write, although unless you have music I can't imagine the specified verse being whispered.

( Posted by: t [Member] On: May 8, 2005 )





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