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I wept
with heart-bursting joy
under hospital lights
with a trickle of dawn peaking
in through the window.

Yes
I cried
the morning you were born.
You cried, too
(poor thing).

I cried again,
when they laid you in that
glass coffin…
and stuck leads onto your delicate skin
and tubes in your
tiny frame.

You laid in silence
like a premature sleeping beauty.
I wanted to kiss
your soft, silky cheek,
and feel your milky breath
on my face.

I thought you needed
to be touched,
cuddled,
loved…

But they had to make sure
you were okay…
before sending you home.
You were
just a whisper of a child.

So, I’d stand by your bubble,
staring at your chest,
hoping for the slightest flutter
so I’d know you were breathing.

And I’d hope
That you’d be okay
(You know how important
Those first days of nurturing
are supposed to be).

I’d pray…
How I’d pray!
…that the angels
would usher you home
to the crib I had painted
just for you --
and not home
to The Father
so soon.

I’ve always
loved you,
my sweetheart.
Thank you
for being
Mine.

4/21/05


------
Here, I share, with stark honesty, my life.


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The following comments are for "I Wept"
by FeliciaStone

Brought tears to my eyes
Paula-
"You were just a whisper of a child." is my favorite line, but the whole poem is touching. To see one so tiny and fragile, evokes such emotion. You captured very nicely how we ache for our babies.
Thank you for sharing this-

Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 24, 2005 )

me too
so did I

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: April 24, 2005 )

felicia's grace...
how precious, your love...and how gracious you
are...lovely vision...

Robin

( Posted by: Robinbird [Member] On: April 24, 2005 )

FeliciaStone
So sad, My heart goes out to you

Sean Micheals

( Posted by: SeanMicheals [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

Liz - a whisper of a child
Thanks Liz, I loved that line. She's still a whisper in terms of size.

You are so good about reading and commenting. I just wanted you to know that I notice, and I appreciate it.

My computer is going painfully slow lately so I haven't been able to read and comment as much as usual (along with the crazy, busyness of life). But, I will go back and read more of your work as soon as possible.

I have read some of yours that I really liked.

Regards,

Paula

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

Soos - did you really?
Did you really weep? I cried writing this one.

I'm trying to go back and write about things I didn't take time to write about when I was so busy experiencing them.

As always, I really value your comments. Thanks for being so supportive.

You rock!

Paula

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

Demeter - hauntingly beautiful
Demeter,

Thanks for the cool comment! I've been having fun reading your work - sorry I haven't been able to comment on all of them lately. I just need to get this computer running right again.

Be well,

Paula

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

Robinbird - I wept
You've got to wonder how many people this very moment are going through this experience.

I'm glad my moment was 20 years ago.

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this piece.

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

Seanmichaels - hearts
How wonderful to be part of community of writers who we get to know somewhat through their writing, and "feel their pain". Thank you for feeling mine.

I appreciate your time. Thanks for commenting on this piece.

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

good thoughts back at felicia
I love this site for the chance to show, and read, and meet people I'd like to know. I am so inspired by this site, even through upsets. I've caused a few of my own.
Still. Where else do people read us with open minds and arms and hearts?
I have a lot of support at home, but even they roll their eyes when I am revising.
It's always a pleasure to read you. I enjoy the mutual consideration. I am busy too. I know you will look for me, as I will you.

Best blessings, Paula-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

real or not?
Is this a true story or is this a dream or something?

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: April 27, 2005 )

Zoner - yes, real
This is about my daughter who had problems with apnea when she was born. She was fine within a month(or so)of her birth.

I'm sure a lot of people have felt the raw emotion of having a sick child. No every experience turns out as good as ours. Our hearts go out to those people.

Thanks again for stopping in and reading my post.

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 27, 2005 )





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