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Having suffered for years, Tommy decides that today is the day for action.

He waits until the basketball game is over; Stonewall loses by seven points and so the players shower and head home. Tommy follows one of them.

In the woods, at the edge of where the real nice houses start, Tommy calls out to Bret; hes been tracking him for two miles now.

Yeah, what do you want? says Bret.

Simple, says Tommy, I want your legs.

What are you talking about shortie?

Your legs, Tommy repeats.

Bret continues on his way.

But Tommy is determined. Tommy has suffered for years. He removes a hacksaw from his backpack.

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The following comments are for "Small Pigeon Toes"
by gogolism

Blue Eyes
Reminds me of something I read by Octavio Paz - 'The Blue Boquet'.

It's a fairly short piece about a gringo vacationing (or something - been awhile) in Mexico leaves his hotel for a brisk evening walk. He gets stopped by a Mexican with a machete who says he wants to cut out his eyes to make a blue boquet with them, for his lover. Well, the dude gets out of it by showing the Mexican that he in fact doesn't have green eyes, and everyone lives happily ever after.

...not the case in your peace...


( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: April 21, 2005 )

Gogolism and the Andy Shop
G-ism (heh!)

You are a twisted psycho. How sweet! Gotta love it!

Is there more???


( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: April 21, 2005 )

short story
sick fun!

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: April 22, 2005 )

blame the meda
drsoos, lans, andy

thank you for the comments ...but i say, that which is left unsaid, unwritten, invisible, can only be completed by the audience; and thus, this story is only a portal for what exists in all of us (little tommy cuts down a tree)

( Posted by: gogolism [Member] On: April 22, 2005 )

I don't know, gogolism. Sounds like an unwarranted case of leg-envy to me...

My mind, of course, pines for those legs. I would like to see you branch out with this story more, but I don't want to keep needling you about it. I'm just a poet, what do I know of short stories/flash. What a cone-head I am!

At the risk of sounding sappy, let me leaf you with this: this piece is really growing on me...


( Posted by: gibsongirl [Member] On: April 22, 2005 )

when a tree falls
but of course; of course, with a span of some forty feet, when that tree falls it should properly crush young Bret

( Posted by: gogolism [Member] On: April 22, 2005 )

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