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Electric kisses
Backlit timpani cloud burst
Two thundering hearts


The following comments are for "Lightning"
by BarnSturm

I'm glad to see you! I love the snap, crackle, pop of this bit. It's got sizzle....

Pretty snazzy!


( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: April 21, 2005 )

BarnSturm Lightning
barnsturm: your haiku is intriguing. i don't precisely know how to go about reviewing it, because it is quite a foreign object of a haiku. it does have a good firm foundation as a poem. i enjoyed the word choices to set the mood, and the image was clear. it's very 'modern', but that is not meant as a judgement. it has a new flavor that i enjoyed reading.

( Posted by: skulduggery [Member] On: April 21, 2005 )

This haiku rocks! Just luv the choice of words and imagery.

( Posted by: quill [Member] On: April 26, 2005 )

from the author
Hey all,

Thanks for reading my haiku and commenting. I haven't been back here in a while due to a crazy work load and a back injury.

Special thanks to Gigi Byte for encouraging me to submit stuff here.

Glad to be here!


( Posted by: BarnSturm [Member] On: May 10, 2005 )

I had to follow you here, behind your comment, because your name caugth my eye and made me wonder what you wrote....
and BOY I am glad........I love the imagery in this Haiku.....wonderful job man....
Best of luck with your back injury.......

Darlene :)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: May 10, 2005 )

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