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An alarm clock screams. This isn’t electronic buzzing or radio talk show jive, this sound is alive and it shrieks like a monkey in a Plexiglas cage.

She is an infant Gibbon, contained in a 3’ cube and trained by electricity to wake her master each morning at 615.

619: She screams, she wails…

627: The cube vibrates on the nightstand. It is heavy but her efforts tip it slightly as she howls and scratches at the Plexi’.

The master is still as a stone. A breeze ruffles the hairs on his head. A heart attack has silenced him in the night. The alarm clock shrieks on and on.




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The following comments are for "monkey in a plexiglas cage"
by gogolism

Gogs...
Sheer insanity. This made me *drool* How surreal.

Andy

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: April 21, 2005 )

Gogolism!
You really shouldn't have written flash about me, Darling! Honestly, a starring roll ~.O

I have to agree with AB and diagnose you as Certified and Classified Insane.

Welcome to the 'club'.

Like this side of you! It's crazed!

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: April 21, 2005 )

mo of dat
strange, gibson,

speaking of darkness and good reading: I'd like to see more from both of you, from haiku to ballyhoo....

Gogolism

( Posted by: gogolism [Member] On: April 21, 2005 )

stuff
A great, beautiful, and dark image.

( Posted by: quintessenseofdust [Member] On: April 21, 2005 )

hail to the concise
Love the image we get of the alarm clock and the dead man. It says so much with so little. I almost don't even want it to be stated so bluntly that he had a heart attack. Somehow I think it speaks numbers without it, but who knows--I'm like that.

Kudos to your simile of the clock's screaming as monkey-like by the way. Fabulous.

-Ames

( Posted by: notoneiota [Member] On: May 6, 2005 )

no sim
thank you for the comment but no similie was intended; this is a pseudo-science fiction story (of course, how strange is it and how far off are we really?)....the embittered imagery comes from my three years in retail management

( Posted by: gogolism [Member] On: May 6, 2005 )

gotcha
Ah, I see. Perchance I'm too honed to jump up and down at the word "like" or "as" and say "metaphor" to my computer screen, expecting it to pat me on the head. But I like the science-fictioniness of it now that I understand the physicality of the clock/primate. Gives it an almost Bradbury feel. Sweetness. Thanks for the clear up.

How far off indeed.
-Ames

( Posted by: notoneiota [Member] On: May 7, 2005 )

unconscious symbols
Common symbols exist whether we notice them, or not. Your contrast of the one ticker stopping, while the other ticker continues, emphasizes the stopping, and it points at the temporary nature of life.

( Posted by: Flosengineering [Member] On: May 7, 2005 )





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