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If I start running now,
Maybe I can make it to the door.
These tears in my eyes hold me back and how
I donít know if I can take anymore.

I often wondered,
What this pain would feel like again
Everythings become so blundered
And these words are beginning to blend.

The jesters court has become my home
And Iíll play the fool again
Before dawn Iíll be left here alone
Ending so long before it begins.


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If I knew all I know now...then. I'd have still made the same mistakes - - because I wouldn't believe myself.


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The following comments are for "41705 - #1"
by unluckymonkey

Unluckymonkey
I understand what you're saying. I don't have the answer to the title riddle, though! I would have to guess zip code if forced...

I have a question/suggestion:

"These tears in my eyes hold me back and how
I donít know if I can take anymore. "

the "and how" seems a little off base for the rest of the piece. If it were "and so" it would make a clearer conjunction to the next line. It would be less out of place, I think.

What do you think?

L

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: April 18, 2005 )

well...
*smirk* .. It was a rough poem .. spawn out of hurt and pain at 3 am.
As for the title
4-17-05. It's a date, not a zip code. I had no idea that the title would intrigue.
Thanks for the comment.
Getting back into writing has been a rough ... and somewhat satisfying expirement.
Forgive the horrid typos - I'm not entirely awake.

( Posted by: unluckymonkey [Member] On: April 18, 2005 )

Smirky Monkey
Yeah, the date would be the OBvious answer, eh? I must be dain bramaged. At least today.

I forgot to mention that I appreciated your poem, U.M. It was not only understood, but hit close to home.

Hard to be kept awake at that hour with those feelings.

Coffee?

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: April 18, 2005 )





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