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It is midnight…
Everything is hushed
Only cold breeze
Flying high and light
Dancing joyfully through the air
Passing lightly across my hair
Dwelling in my limbs
They are cold now
I need a shelter
To cover my skin so tight
To protect my heart inside
My coat is not enough
I am still cold
I put on coats and socks
Yet not enough warmth
I am alone and cold
And suddenly you pass gently
Across my mind ,heart and soul
I feel the blood running through my veins
And make the heat return to my limbs
I feel warm now…
I feel warm…


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The sweet is never as sweet without the sour, and I know the sour which allows me to appreciate the sweet.


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The following comments are for "Remembering You"
by fairgrace

fairgrace's memories for warmth
Fairgrace: I enjoyed this read. Only problem I have is with.."I feel the blood running through my veins/And make the heat coming to my limbs."
Maybe:
"making the heat return to my limbs." It is just a suggestion.

A "warming" read.
Bobby

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 14, 2005 )

Thanks Bobby
Appreciate your comment

your suggestings are always welcome...sure I will change it


thanks again

( Posted by: fairgrace [Member] On: April 15, 2005 )

I teach
Hiba, this piece is great! It is really lovely. How sweet, how beautiful!! You got my heart!! The answer to your question, I teach High school social studies.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: April 29, 2005 )





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