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In our social ecosystem
a delicate balance is maintained.
Every participant is crucial
to the health and survival
of the young heir.

The workers carry the burden
of feeding the legatee,
and providing a constant supply of fodder;
intellectual appetizers, social entrées
and rich desserts of love and encouragement.

Without the workers,
the young heir will never
meet his satisfied potential
or be worthy of his inheritance
with wisdom, strength, and grace.

But, the workers are dispensable.
Some fill transitory positions,
like teachers, tutors and caregivers --
receiving a temporary stipend.
They are dismissed at will.

Other workers are paid more,
in intangible, precious things
but receive no monetary gain;
rather they invest their meager earnings
To clothe, nourish and advance Him.

The matriarch does little,
sitting on her throne at the center,
wrapping herself in silk, and spending
all her resources and time
preening and managing the workers.

She had once read,
“You shall know the truth
and the truth shall set you free.”
So she keeps the workers in the dark --
in chains of submission to her random will.

Each worker is cleverly assigned a cell
where their knowledge and observations
cannot be shared with others --
especially those closest to the center;
who are only safe if silent.

Despite her desires, she cannot kill them.
It’s far too messy and raises suspicion.
Rather, she turns the others against them,
hypnotizing them with flattery, false information,
and conjured sympathy for her exaggerated woes.

But ours is a social ecosystem --
a delicate balance is maintained.
Every participant is crucial
to the health and survival
of the young heir.

So... every well-meaning contributor
trudges along, laying gifts at His feet.
And every form of anarchy is quenched,
because if the queen is deposed
the underdeveloped successor will pay.

4/11/05







------
Here, I share, with stark honesty, my life.


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The following comments are for "Fodder for the Heir"
by feliciastone

Many Meanings, Felicia
Hmm.. I got a lot of different readings from this. I think that could easily be considered a mark of good work, the ability to interpret as you wish. The "Him" though made me begin to think that you might have been talking about religion, and perhaps the matriarch was the church. I, of course, could be completely off course with what you meant to say, but the reading is most certainly there.

I like it a lot, Felicia. Then again, I always like your work.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Casey - cool
This is a poem that many meanings can be read into. I really liked your anology of the church.

However, the "Him" is capitalized because he is the heir - royalty in terms of how it's really all about raising up our young boy (who is a major player in so many people's lives, and the common denomonator who brings all of the workers and the queen into the same life arena).

We are all the workers - his Dad, me (his step-mom), teahers, daycare people, etc. etc. - and the queen is his mom.

Thanks for reading, Casey. I always appreciate your comments!

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Heir raising
Fun read Felicia! I couldn't help but think to myself that this mom doesn't get to play queen! No, I am just one of the workers. (Do you think that its cruel that I have told my children [18 and 13] that they are really just well loved parasites?) ;)
Nice read, as usual-

Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Eliz - Fodder
Elizabeth,

Good moms are workers, and there's no queen in that situation. Keep up the good "work"!

Thanks for stopping in and commenting. I appreciate it.

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Demeter - what I love
I love to write poems that are multifaceted; specific, yet vague - so they can relate to more people. I really feel like this is one of those poems.

I especially like it when I am writing a poem of a personal nature. It takes the spotlight off the real point, so you can speak your mind while maintaining some level of privacy.

Thanks as always for visiting. I love your comments as well as your work. You are very genuine - I like that.

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

casey - typos, sorry
I'm trying to get back in the swing of posting and commenting. I just re-read my response to you on "Fodder for the Heir" and it was riddled with typos - haste does indeed make waste!

Sorry to all who suffered through it!

:)

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

To "Heir" Is Human...
Felicia: What an entertaining read. Levels, twists and turns, disinformation, thought provoking manipulations..it has much to offer reader.

Enjoyed,
B

( Posted by: bobby7L [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Bobby - to heir is human
Bobby,

Thanks for reading and commenting. I read it again from the perspectives of Casey and Demeter and there were so many levels of meaning, depending on how they interpreted it.

That did make it an entertaining read, for sure.

Thanks again Bobby!

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 13, 2005 )

mammas boy
Very nice felicia. I particularly liked the second stanza. Overall I thought this was a warning that our society places the responsibility for raising children solely in the hands of the parents, particularly the matriarch, whereas in older cultures and tribal society, the community and family played a much larger role.

I also interpreted the meaning to be the boy child manipulated and tied to the mother and finding it harder to break free. Men will often compare their wives and partners to their mothers in terms of cooking or housekeeping, etc. So on one hand the mother is neccessary for the development and nurturing of the child, but she can also hamper that development by becoming too dominant a figure in their lives. So that's another interpretation, I guess.

Very thoughtful and well-written. I didn't find any structural defects or foundational micro-flaws. ;) It flowed just right.

cheers
smithy




( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: April 13, 2005 )

Smithy - your interp
Again, I like re-reading it after being given another perspective. So true that a smothering mom can do as much damage as good (or more).

Thanks for the compliment on the flow.

Regards,

Felicia

( Posted by: feliciastone [Member] On: April 13, 2005 )





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