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Like smoke signals sent above
the pale you is the one I love,
stop and start with each old throw
of the blanket of our home,
burning art, is the only way to go.

Scarred violas catch our eye
a happy sight you can't deny,
struck with love in every voice
the melancholy of the noise,
damaged goods, is the only way to go.

Burning cellos on the wind
light sweet embers let us in,
turning pale into gold
the cuts and bruises that we hold,
ugly love, is the only way to go.


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Ask not what you can do to poetry, but what poetry can do to you.


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The following comments are for "Burning Cellos on the Wind"
by londongrey

Smokin'
Smoldering!
Nice to see you posting again!

Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Catch a fire...
londongrey: Exquisite in its imagery..A primo post!


Enjoyable read to return with and to,
Bobby

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Bob, Elizabeth and Bobby
Thanks guys,

This actually means more to me than I thought, I guess because it comes from an album a very special friend and I share a love for. This is written to the rhythm of a song 'Your Gonna Make me Lonesome When You Go' by Madeleine Peyroux.

Thank you again

Alex xxx

( Posted by: Londongrey [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Lilia!!!!
Hello!!!! And you better respond to my PM!! You better!! LOL

Thank you

Alex xxxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: April 13, 2005 )

Welcome Home Alex!
Hugs and kisses.....now to comment.

it is SO nice to be reading something your beautiful mind has created. This is beautiful Alex. There is SO much NOT said too that catches a poet's eye/heart. Very wonderful imagery, hot yes...steamy yes...delicious YES.

The way I see it anyway!!!

Warmly,
Darlene ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: April 13, 2005 )

londongrey
burning cellos on the wind seems like a very somber smell. i like the feel you've written here. i think the last line of each stanza is encumbered by the 'is the only way to go'. it's rhythm is chunky where you have delicately scored the rest of the work.

( Posted by: skulduggery [Member] On: April 13, 2005 )

Burning Cellos on the Wind
Good to see ya back here kickin some poetry ass on this site! I ain't got a whole lotta time these days, but shit it's good to see your work here. I think this read really cool. Gives ya a kind of feeling. I can feel it, and ain't that what it's ALL about in writing?

( Posted by: DieBaronHobskewward [Member] On: April 16, 2005 )

Burning Cellos
This is about the 4th time I've been by this poem and I like it more and more with each reading. It's written with much passion and knowing, deep from the heart.

I haven't heard any music by Peyroux but will definitely check her out. I'm always looking for something new that is good. I was delighted to see you mention Erykah Badu in a comment elsewhere. God, I just love her. I found her music a year or so ago and can't get enough of it. I've got two of her CD's and can play them over and over again and the music is fresh as ever.

I almost always have music on when writing, so I can appreciate how Burning Cellos came about.

You mentioned getting away from lit.org due to egos, etc. - maybe just spending a little less time here would help. I've been involved with poetry for over 45 years and believe me, this site is pretty tame. It would be a shame to entirely lose your warm, artistic, intellectually-caring, and sometimes sad voice.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: April 22, 2005 )

Skul, Joseph, gomar
Thank you for your comments, this is in fact on of the few poems I am revising, as these are more like lyrics to me.

Jospeh I don't only kick ass ya know *wink* hehe.

Thank you Gomar for your comments, I am quite often sad but in the stupid sense rather than the tearful sense :-)

A xxx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: April 23, 2005 )





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