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measuring the weight
of words spoken
just after our eyes kissed

believing in something
though broken
it's the truth she missed


stars remain my friends
long after they are gone

sparkling as if smiling
a glimmer before dawn


memories are free
in endless time and space

shining on forever
in a dream...in a face


10/12/03



------
below the subliminal
deep within manipulation
that's where tr^th resides

2 Dec 2011






























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The following comments are for "words and stars"
by Bobby7L

Our "Words"
Tap: There is a half-life to our "words." Like the light we "see" from long dead "stars," they live on.

"Words and Stars" was inspired by a girl very dear to me. I penned it a few years after we went our "seperate ways."

That your post today is titled "Words," is interesting. I saw "face" in there, as well.

Thanks for reading and letting me know,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Stars and words
Very nice comparison of remembered love to stars-
They are there for the viewing, the reminder, yet can only be appreciated, not touched-
I enjoyed!
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Terrific Write
How sparkling, elegant, and memorable this is. Thanks for sharing.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

emaks: star-crossed
Elizabeth: Your kind words are much appreciated.

In light of recent exchanges on front page, another level should be noted. There is measurable "weight" to our "words."


Never underestimate talking,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Char: word gazing
Char: Much appreciated. This poem is personal. Put in line a few months back, then pulled before posted. Recent readings here at Lit inspired/motivated me to post.

Thank you for taking time here,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

stars in tina's eyes
Tina: I was insecure, with respect to posting this poem on the NET...Was so attached to it. You have made me feel better about its release here at Lit.

It was published in a small regional artists magazine (TAPAWINGO), along with 3 other poems of mine, last year. I've changed 1 word {"you" to "she"} and its look, for posting here.

Your reaction to it is good for my heart.
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

exception rules!


Tasty beets in a sensible size. Done well and then done. I truly enjoyed this - thanks

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

soos:Red, in moderation
soos: Much appreciated soos...

chard roots rock
low-ku mighty dread
kaya mon

BobbyG

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Char: weight of words
Char: Thank you for extravagant rating (my per usual disclaimer-see "gazing," for further reasoning)...My next post in line, "Not a poem for a 10," was penned after reading several recent posts here at Lit.

RW

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Bobby this is a 10
I am totally agreeing with my sweet friend Char on this rating. It is a very nice poem.
I often gaze into the sky late evenings as I lay in bed. Amazes me how distant people can be on this planet, but yet, at the same time, our eyes can kiss the same star.

Also, Bob, I am VERY happy that you are going to be posting more.....thanks, it really is nice to know why too...

Very well done,
Darlene ;)

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Darlene: looking up
Darlene: Everything happens for reason. That's what I believe. If we all inspired and in turn were inspired, as well, imagine what we could do...

Your kind words are greatly appreciated. Thank you so much.

All is heart,
Bobby

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Sorry
I hate to be a party pooper but I didn't care for this a whole lot. It's sincere, honest and nice, but struck me as a little ordinary and reminded me of too many other poems I've read. I realize it's a personal poem and that's just the way they have to come out. I'm not putting you down - I've written alot of poems myself that I would critique the same.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Don't be sorry...
I respect your straightforward comment...I've lived with this one since 2003. I've felt same way, at times. There is a story, within the story, which may not transcend the "ordinary" words (cliche) ...The half-life thing and "measurable weight" (of "words") may not translate..I did feel the "eyes" kissing was alright. I even pulled this off the waiting line, before it posted, a few months back...I've also been told by a University Prof. that it is "brilliant" in its "universal appeal." And its been published in a magazine for artists. Go figure...It just seemed appropriate to post at this time. If you notice, I write about varied subjects in many forms. This is just a minute part of "me." I appreciate you reading and letting me know what you think,
B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Teflon streaks across sky
Tef: Thanks for reading and letting me know..As you see, I'm back posting at Lit. My days at Wf were few, but illuminating. If a young niece had not been reading all my posts there, including comments at a "poem" with a certain "c" word used profusely, that her Mother was quite upset about, I'd probably have had a different feeling/approach/outcome there.

Thanks,
B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

Lilia: of words and their weight
Lilia: You sure know there is measurable "weight" to our "words." (You've seen/felt it!)..And a half-life, as well....

Your continued interest is much appreciated.
B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 12, 2005 )

"words and stars"
I recomposed a PM to you today and "phttt!", it too got gobbled up into cyberspace somewhere. So I gave up on PM, re-wrote it, and submitted it as a blog and hope it will be accepted. So after awhile, check out "recent blogs" and hopefully it will show up there. It's the only thing I've posted as a blog.

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: April 19, 2005 )

Bob's Blog
Bob: I look forward to it...Can't imagine...

Bobby

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 19, 2005 )

Stars
"When our eyes kissed"
beutiful piece of work
Sean Micheals

( Posted by: SeanMicheals [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

it is ok ps read my new works
i think it could do with a little more work as to the object the poem about is not clear but that is just me but as to the message i believe it delivers a sharp precise image

( Posted by: MortalAngel [Member] On: April 27, 2005 )

SeanM/Mortal Angel...
Sean, Thanks for reading and letting me know.

MAngel, Although inspired by one person, it is also about the weight/residue of our words..and our perceptions..Thanks for reading and letting me know..

B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: May 11, 2005 )





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