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The world is crumbling
beneath our feet
the waves, the wind
humility, defeat

Greed and corruption
paving the roads
unsteady working conditions
increasing the loads

trifling winds
carrying a cry of despair
take a look at our world
nobody cares

of punishment and crime
an unbalanced scale
where cowards flee
between their legs, their tail

pressure rampaging
throughout the schools
where memorization
is the primary tool

of unpunished teachers
escaping a trial
of a nations shocking absurdity
at Marth Stewart's trial
Michael Jackson's style
or plain kids in denial

where a safe haven presides
in far away places
and my memory resides
in an unsafe world
where hatred presides

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The following comments are for "My World"
by MortalAngel

Welcome Jamie
Welcome to Lit. You posted a poem with same title as one of mine.(Penned in 2000)..I changed my title to "Our World." You probably could, as well. Some good stuff..Keep writing..

Bobby

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 15, 2005 )

hey
im not really new to the literary world i have been publidhed hundreds of times at different competititons but i have to admit while mine come from the subjects of my everyday life ps keep in touch with me at MortalAngel16@yahoo.com

( Posted by: MortalAngel [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

to bobby
you know what, was your poem totally different to his, but with the same title? yes, because i read both of them. you didn't have to change the title because the title is important to literacy.

( Posted by: mandilynn89 [Member] On: April 25, 2005 )

my world
Jamie? cool name. this poem rocks!

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: May 9, 2005 )





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