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So this is the deal
I am what I am
I don't offer things
That other men can

I don't have their money
Their clothes or their car
My wallet is thin
I'm not a big star

I can't afford diamonds
or jewels or rings
But don't you leave now
I can offer one thing
My gift is not bought
Nor can it be sold
It's price is determined
By the value you hold

Worthless if rejected
It's only for you
The one thing inside me
That's pure and is true

Some may never touch it
And most will not see
But if you'll except it
My offer is me

Me in my arms
when their holding you tight
My lips when they kiss you
That spark you ignite
My eyes when they see you
Our hands when they hold
My coat on your shoulders
When you say you're not cold
I don't have a yaught
Or a house by the sea
But as long as I live
I promise you me

I know your uncertain
My jobs not secure
I dont live for tommorow
My futures a blur

Our road might be rocky
There'll be ups and downs
But whatever the problem
My love will stay sound

When the going gets tough
When it's too dark to see
I promise you light
When I promise you me

Me with my chest
Where your little head lay
My ears that listen
To each word that you say
My heart that will love you
My tears when they cry
My soul that is yours
Till the day that I die

So make your decision
There's money or love
These words are not mine
They come from above

It's all on you now
What path you will see
Whatever your choice
You'll always have me

Me in my thoughts
Each time that I breath
A gift is forever
Wnen the promise is me

Heart break and no fear

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The following comments are for "My Promise"
by SeanMicheals

You can't lose
S6, L2 'their' should be 'they're'

You've spelled 'yacht' wrong (I had to look it up.)

This is very nice Sean Micheals. It looks like a song form of poetry, not lyrics, but a poetic song. An anthem. I can feel the emotion that goes into this heart-felt and very convincing argument for love for love's sake. The decision this poem begs seems clear. Nicely done. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: April 16, 2005 )

My Promise
Sean Michael, This poem is a delight. I loved the thought, the flow, actually the whole thing. Promising you, what more can someone ask for. Absolutely enjoyed!


( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: April 16, 2005 )

I agree with above comments. Lucky girl-your love is so true-
best of luck-

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 16, 2005 )

Thank you all
Thanx so much for commenting. In a perfect world these words would have meant something to her. But unfortunately for me all the love in the world could not make her heart feel the same.

( Posted by: SeanMicheals [Member] On: April 23, 2005 )

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