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I don't quite think You understand
Just what You've done to me.
My gay little Universe is rocked,
Morphed, and wholly upset.

My faith comes ever more under trial.
My station in life,
though only slightly altered,
Leaves me standing, uncertain.

A sensation,
All but purged from my mind,
Returns all too quickly.
Can you even comprehend
Just what you have set in motion?!

Atrophy loses its Ferric brace;
Repressed memory
Comes flooding back.
My fist unclenches;
I collapse from my stance
As I surrender
And bow to your will.

She has informed me of my fate.
I have no choice
But to fall, under Her influence.
YOU made me do this!!

How could You?

Damn you...

How could You remind me?

Why would You make me?

How can I stop it?...

...Should I, if, at all, I can?

Answers are left unheard, unknown
As the feeling returns.

'Hello, Love.'

Your hushed voice
Warms my all but barren heart,
Failing my own nature.
No choice remains
But submission to your will.

I smile...

------
'He who knows others is learned. He who knows himself is wise.'
-Lao Tzu

'Tomorrow will take us away,
Far from home--
No one will ever know our names,
But the bards' songs will remain.
Tomorrow, all will be known,
And You're not alone,
So don't be afraid
In the dark and cold
'Cause the bards' songs will remain.
They all will remain
In my thoughts and in my dreams
They're always in my mind....
Come close Your eyes;
You can see them, too.'
Blind Guardian,
The Bard's Song: Into the Forest


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The following comments are for "The Will"
by the Co.konspirator

William, you're my hero
I don't think I ever fully explained to you how much I like this piece; so many different layers of love here, such submission and passion for your beliefs. You pervay your emotions so well, not in typical methods like metaphor, but in realistic speech. Your poetry feels like a snippet of your prayer. It's absolutely beautiful how your faith shines through here.
-Casey

( Posted by: shefallssoftly [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

Tina, Casey...
Thank you for your wonderfully sweet words on my piece. Tina, how I have missed your in depth analysis, not of my poem, but its context in me and how it applies to you. It's quite astounding, in itself.

Casey, knowing me as you do, you know there ARE nigh infinite layers of love which I find to apply to one situation or another. Also, you've finally given me a perfect descriptor of my style.

Thank you both for continuing my inspiration.

Namaste,
Liam

( Posted by: the Co.konspirator [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )

The Co.K
It is good to read your work again. But again since my leaving there has been a sincere hange in many writers on this forum, and it is change for the good not the worse.

I find myself immersed in more sensitivity towards our own selves which is so refreshing and clean.

Thank you for sharing this piece.

Alex

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: April 11, 2005 )





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