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The dream is dead.
The King of Rome shall not live.
I shall never hear the media crunch of the first step upon Mars.
I shall never taste the caviar of the future.
I shall never smell napalm in the morning.
I will never take that hot-balloon ride over the Willamette Valley with a champagne lunch.
I will never find the bottom of the politic water-fall, where peace and fury foam.
My dream is dead,
dead upon the page,
dead for you to read.

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The following comments are for "To The Noble Mind"
by seanspacey

Sean, you are a very gifted and unique writer. I have read a few of your pieces and hope to get to a few more and leave some comments. There is a great fluidity to your free-form that is especially vivid in imagery. Here I'm wondering what you meant by the "politic waterfall"? Did you mean politic in the prudent crafty sense or political? If it was political I think political works better, but that's just me. My mind might not be noble enough for politic. The third line was my favourite here.

( Posted by: Smithy [Member] On: April 4, 2005 )

Thank you for your kind words. After thinking it over, I think "political" is better, too. I have this work on other sites that are easier to modify and I'll modify it there. You have quite the avatar; what is it exactly?

( Posted by: seanspacey [Member] On: April 4, 2005 )

avatar lizard
Hi sean. It's a blue-tongued skink. I tend to change my avatar a bit to fit with the style of poems or stories I am writing. While I have been commenting on the poems of "theamazingkyle" who is feliciastone's step-son and only 6, I put skinky up there. I had some gruesome looking charactors up previously. I lost my computer late last year and all my old pictures too. This was one I happened to find while looking up some info on wild-life. We have lizards here (australia) called blue-tongues, but this one is from Africa I think.

( Posted by: Smithy [Member] On: April 5, 2005 )

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