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Really Hot Day

When I woke up


It was seventy-five degrees.
I was sweating so much
That I couldnít even breathe.
The air conditioner didnít work,
So I went to the store
And buyed a new air conditioner
But it still didnít work.
I was still hot.
I was so hot I needed to take my shirt off.
I woked up my Dad
And said it was seventy-five degrees out.
He tried to buy a new fan.
It didnít work.
And then it was almost midnight -
Yippie! It would be cold!

Kyle Coombs

2-24-05


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(A note from his family: Be kind and remember he is six. - We'll let you know when he is ready for critique. These are not edited for grammatical and other errors. They are dictated by the authro and recorded.)


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by theamazingkyle

hot stuff
Hi Kyle. Smithy here. I'd say this was cool, but instead it was really hot! I liked this one so much I gave you a score of 10/10. At least it got cool around midnight. Good work. Have fun.
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: Smithy [Member] On: April 5, 2005 )

Smithy! - From Kyle
Thank you for reading my poem. Thank you for giving me a 10. I am really excited about me having two tens.

Thank you for reading my poems.

Kyle

( Posted by: Theamazingkyle [Member] On: April 9, 2005 )





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