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Kyle’s Hamsters

When I woke up
My hampsters were squeeling.
I didn’t know what they were doing!
But I knew they were doing something.
I looked
And I saw what was going on.
They were just playing


And I was saying, “Huh? - Why are they squeeling?
This was so weird!
They never squeeled.
(They were always noisy at night -
But I never heared them.)
Every night they were squeeling.
I thought they were fighting,
But they were trying to make babies.
And then it was twelve o’clock to midnight,
And they were all to sleep.

Kyle Coombs
2-24-05


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(A note from his family: Be kind and remember he is six. - We'll let you know when he is ready for critique. These are not edited for grammatical and other errors. They are dictated by the authro and recorded.)


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The following comments are for "Kyle's Hampsters"
by theamazingkyle

happy hampsters
Hi Kyle. This is smithy again. I thought your poem was very cool and weird too. They must be happy hampsters to be playing and squeeling with delight. I wonder how they can even see at night?
Your animals are very interesting and sound like fun. I look forward to hearing more about them.

from smithy

( Posted by: Smithy [Member] On: April 3, 2005 )

Smithy - Hampsters
You read another one of my poems. You are really nice.

I think my hampsters see at night because they act like they are nocturnal. We have a nightlight in that room near the tank. I can't keep them in my room because they would keep me awake all night.

Thank you for reading my poem and writing that nice note too.

Kyle

( Posted by: Theamazingkyle [Member] On: April 9, 2005 )

Demeter - My pets
To Demeter from Kyle:

Hi Demeter. I like that you read my poems and write me notes.

You had a python? How big was it? How big do they get?

I have a boa constricter and we feed it mice too. It will get to be 13 feet long, but Paula says she hopes it doesn't grow too fast. Last night, it ate a mouse but we didn't get to see it.

In school, we are going to be studying reptiles and my teacher asked Paula to bring in our two turtles and our snake. It will be cool for the kids to see them.

I can bring in my hampsters, fish, geckos and hermit crabs for show-n-tell once the air is a little warmer here in Maine.

Thanks for reading my poem. I hope you write me more notes.

From Kyle.

( Posted by: Theamazingkyle [Member] On: April 9, 2005 )

hamsters
You should get some rats for pets. Rats are way smarter than hamsters and they don't eat their own babies. They're real cool too.

( Posted by: ZonerZone [Member] On: April 24, 2005 )





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