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Does anybody Know what I'm talkin about
Have you ever been lost
Have you ever stuck out
Have you ever hurt so bad that it makes you cry
Have you ever fell down
or lost a fight
well i knew this day would come
When you said we were done

I've gone blue with out you
every day is a chore
I can't stand any more
of being blue without you

Have you ever been wrong
or failed a test
have you ever fell short
been second best
cause now this si how I feel
I'm driving without a wheel
cause I'm blue without you
my lifes going on
but it feels so wrong
living blue without you

Have you ever spoke out
without thinking it through
or yelled at a friend
thats been good to you
Sometimes I just dont know
Why you had to go

Now I'm blue without you
I want to forget
the day that we met
cause I'm blue without you
Worse than before
my heart feels soar
livin blue without you

have you been alone
and wanted to talk
have you ever felt sad
or ever been malked
I always feel this way
since you went away
Ive gone blue without you
I'm not the same man
I need you to stand
I am blue without you
I dream that one day
you'll love me again
because I'm blue without you


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Heart break and no fear


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The following comments are for "Blue"
by SeanMicheals

Not bad.....
I'll comment on this piece. It's not bad, I feel your pain. I think we all have at one point or another. Now, in the body of work, I found little things that can be fixed. With out is without and every day is everyday. You want the reader to actually read the poem, not to put their focus on small details like this. It seems to be written in anger or haste. If it was fixed up it would be a fine piece of writing.

( Posted by: kraziRenee [Member] On: April 10, 2005 )

kraziRenee
Agreed, the punctuation is horrible. I wrote this late at night on the fly and I never proof read. Thanks for reading,
Sean Micheals

( Posted by: SeanMicheals [Member] On: April 16, 2005 )





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