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Whispers in the dark
Things I want to say
But could never utter
In the light of day

Thoughts from buried places
Longing for a spark
Birthing hidden parts of me
Swallowed by the dark

Secret yearnings blossom
In the dark seas of my mind
Posted places-off limit signs
On things I long to find

My womanís voice canít be so bold
To sell my soul to day
But I can, as light grows dim
Let thoughts come out and play

Throughout the daylight hours
My thoughts have made their mark
Reminding me of things I see
With whispers in the dark


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The chief cause of failure and unhappiness is trading what you want most for what you want now. - Zig Ziglar



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The following comments are for "Whispers in the Dark"
by Deelyte

dark whispers
Enjoyed this. Dee. It really bubbled along in places. The rhyme was good but the rhythmn changed a little in stanza 3. It wasn't quite as fluid as it could be through line 3 of that stanza, I felt. Apart from that I liked stanzas 2 and 4 the best. Another good one though.
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: Smithy [Member] On: April 2, 2005 )





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