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let me waste forever here.
let me be trapped in this moment.
let eternity pass.

where the sun peeks through
the unending horizon,
where rays of light blend peacefully
with darkness receding,
where the earth weeps the night's passing
as it yawns the sleep away from its eyes,
where the moon slowly fades goodbye,
fog melting into dew
perched precariously
waiting to fall once more
to oblivion.

let me stay
where dreams are freshly remembered,
where yesterday's memories
are uncorrupted by time's passing,
where today is glorious
waiting to be conquered,
where tomorrow is a lifetime away
and nothing else matters.

let me end with the morning.

"...yesterday is only a dream, tomorrow, but a vision..."

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The following comments are for "aurora"
by smms905

very nice
Very nice. I am quite ready to stay too. I liked the imagery and the gentle flow though there were also some nice periods of suspense at the ends of the stanzas. Suspense may not be the right word? The variations and line structure fitted well. That last line was a particular standout.

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: March 29, 2005 )

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