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It was nothing personal -
the clouds have come often lately -
but no rain, and you so worried
about the stock.

Tonight though,
I stand before the sink
sure the clouds are scudding
faster across the moon

Soft puffs of air stir
up through the floor boards
and they smell of rain.
I float into a new weather pattern.

A breeze across my shoulders
you push through my thoughts.
Your hopeful tentative touch
finds out the fire in me.

I think the drought will break tonight.
The washing up can wait.

Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.

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The following comments are for "Tonight"
by Huni

Right as Rain
What a cool poem,Huni. Really cool.


( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: March 24, 2005 )

Huni: "Tonight"
Huni: Let it storm...

Much enjoyed,

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 24, 2005 )

marital merrymaking
Very polite and delicate, yet packs so much desire. Great exercise in Huni-impressionism.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: March 24, 2005 )

thunder and lighting
I can feel the air charged with energy as fronts collide

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: March 24, 2005 )

Rainy Night
Loved the feel of the storm smoldering here. You send a picture with your words.
Joy to you-

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: March 25, 2005 )

there's somthign i really like about this part

A breeze across my shoulders
you push through my thoughts.
Your hopeful tentative touch
finds out the fire in me.

and I feel like the last two lines really wrap it up well.

( Posted by: ruina [Member] On: March 25, 2005 )

dirty dishwashing
My favourite line was the "I float into a new weather pattern." I liked the setting too, where you are washing up and looking out. The subtle undertones of sexuality built to a nice crescendo in that third last line. Very "cool" Huni.

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: March 25, 2005 )

As always
This is a beautiful poem that entices beautiful sensations, imagery and moments shared in another time and place.

Very real, yet very artfully expressed.

Simply delicious.


( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: April 14, 2005 )

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